With technology speeding up, more and more young people begin to use mobile phones and the Internet, but old people have little chance to be exposed to them. What ways could mobile phone and the Internet be useful to old people? How can old people be encouraged to use this new technology?
With the advanced technology, increasing people are exposed to mobile phones and the Internet, yet hardly the elderly have opportunities to access. This essay i would discuss the significant benefits from digital sources to the seniors and give some solutions to encourage them to use these.
Naturally, the modern technology is able to help the seniors keep in touch with their friends, family members. For example , Messenger, one of the prominent apps, contribute to stay connect between the parents and their children via face –to face communication regardless of geographical location..Moreover, the internet is the giant store of information, so elders can get access to a variety of news, scientific breakthroughs, economy.Google, for instance, enables users to read daily news, follow the exchange rate. Ultimately, the old can unwind after intense working days through types of entertainments such as music, movies,reality shows. According to Vietnam's newspaper, the elderly can extend their life span by smiling, and one of the sources of creating smile is comedy shows on the internet.
Despite give merits, the number of the old using the internet and other applications is modest, so i suppose the young and the manufacturer should take the responsibility to encourage the seniors. What the youth should do is to introduce the way to use smart phones such as chatting , calling and guide their grandparents how to navigate websites. Moreover, the manufacturers can launch a new product line with simple functions that is suitable for the elderly. For example, I phone, a crash cow of Apple, has multiple layers for protections may make the old confused to open.
In my conclusion, it is true that the development of technology brings more and more essential advantages for the elderly. To encourage senior citizens to use the technical devices , the young and technology’ producers need to cooperate.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, moreover, so, for example, for instance, i suppose, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1620.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34653465347 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17672609855 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630363036304 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.3888111344 49.4020404114 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.0 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.25 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.08333333333 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.01903807615 339% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255942194685 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0827795604014 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610637253272 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143856788154 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052614114789 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.83 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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