TPO - 24
Job holds utmost importance in everyone's life, for some people it might be their bread and butter while for others it can be a source of gaining experience and learning things. Personally, I agree with the statement that , the best way by which parents can prepare their teenage children for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
To begin with, job fills up with the sense of responsibility. The teenage children are often irresponsible towards their work, as parents used to take care of all the things since childhood. In such situations, part time jobs can help them to become more disciplined and responsible towards their work. My own experience is a compelling example. When I was a teenager, I used to go to library to help the librarian. Gradually, The librarian assigned me the job of opening the library early in the morning as some of the students prefer to study in morning hours. This job made me very punctual about the time. Punctuality and discipline helped me in myriad ways in all my future endeavors. I developed a habit of reaching on time, whatever the condition and situation is as well as I excelled in my studies, jobs etc.
Secondly, doing addition work brings activeness in our life, which is the main thing young generation often struggle with. After doing our daily work and getting tires, we push our body to do more work this imporv our stamina to perform the work. As I said above, I was doing a part time job in a library. I used to work for four hours daily in the morning and then I used go for my college. So in total I worked for more than ten hours a day. This improved my stamina and work effeciency tremendously. Also, I developed a habit of finishing my work well in time. As a result, the part time job helped me in making a more polished verson of myself.
In addition, as we all know "every coin has two sides", therefore, some might be of the opinion that parents should not encourage there children to take a part time job because they are not capable of taking the responsibility at this young age. However, from my perspective taking benefits of taking some extra job far outweigh any negative repercussions.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that part time jobs are good for the teenagers because they improves their skills and abilities and them a more polished person.
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- Children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smart phones, video games for fun and entertainment. Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for children's development. 70
- TPO-11 - Integrated Writing Task 80
- The university has provided student who are going to enter university with two summer vocation grograms. Which one do you think is better for students?1) take some college courses in advance. e.g. some courses that are related to students' major. 2) visit 80
- TPO-44 INDEPENDENT TASKSome people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things togeth 71
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 221, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...sonally, I agree with the statement that , the best way by which parents can prepa...
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Line 3, column 212, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...gs since childhood. In such situations, part time jobs can help them to become more disci...
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Line 3, column 509, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ing the library early in the morning as some of the students prefer to study in morning hou...
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Line 5, column 279, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...he work. As I said above, I was doing a part time job in a library. I used to work for fo...
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Line 5, column 582, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... my work well in time. As a result, the part time job helped me in making a more polished...
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Line 7, column 166, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... not encourage there children to take a part time job because they are not capable of tak...
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... In conclusion, I strongly believe that part time jobs are good for the teenagers because...
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Line 9, column 95, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'improve'
Suggestion: improve
...are good for the teenagers because they improves their skills and abilities and them a m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6618705036 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70530902417 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508393285372 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2507463666 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3636363636 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9545454545 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45454545455 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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