Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? All students should be required to study art and music in secondary school. Use specific reasons to support your answer.
The secondary school provides people with the basic knowledge of every subject and prepare them for real life. However, students find it hard to study some subjects. Also, some people concerned that it is not necessary to study art and music in high school while others strongly disagree with it. From my sight, even though those subjects do not have direct numerous impact on most people, it also encourages them to be the valuable and inherent part of society.
To begin with, music and art provide students with enough time to take a break and relax from their busy lives. Indeed, scientists proved that most people release their stress with the help of music and art. As an illustration, most teenagers that I know have a great taste in music because it gives them a relaxing feeling whenever it is. Moreover, because the competition between people of the university and work has become intense, students need to work hard for all the time despite their grade, nowadays. I think the most effective way to forget about this harsh competition within a few minutes is to listen to music or enjoy the view of art.
Another reason is, the music and art teach a crucial lesson for everyone, to express themselves in many different ways. The life balance itself by giving something more than others for the person who has difficulty in something such as hearing. Just like this, most people have difficulties in communicating with people because of the electronic devices they use in their daily life. I think art and music allow people to indicate their emotion and their mind. For example, because I am not good at expressing my emotions to others, I love drawing, not because I am talented, but because it gives me an opportunity to express myself well and also it encourages my communication skill a lot.
All in all, because every subject teaches a glorious experience for the people, they all equally important. Besides, the pros of learning art and music considerably outweigh its cons which indicates those are crucial for the human being.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 100, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... for everyone, to express themselves in many different ways. The life balance itself by giving...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, moreover, second, so, well, while, for example, i think, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1704.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86857142857 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51758873949 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565714285714 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6795730974 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.5 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.875 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194138305297 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706113787341 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0470143668895 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12271363079 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468377049151 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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