Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The time parent spend with their children is indeed of great importance in that it influences the establishment of childrens' personality. To indicate the importance of the time parents spend with their children, some indicate that it is best for busy parants to spend time playing with their childresn, while others contend that it is best to make use of the limited time busy parents have by doing the childrens' schoolwork activities. I believe that playing games or sports in the time remained not only helps children improve physical abilities, but also it better helps them make up the childrens' personalities and fortifies the bond between the children and their parents.
First of all, there are many sports that children do not have the opportunity to learn in the schools and if parents do not play sports in the time they have with their children, children may never learn these sports. Rarely it occurs that children learn various types of sports by taking sport classes. For instance, I always loved to ride bicycle, but I never learned to do so since I did not own a bicycle, and my parents should have provided one for me. They used to tell me that we have to go to a bycicle pist in order to teach me, but they did not have the time to do so; therefore, I never learnt to ride a bicycle despite my passion for it.
Second, playing games with children even sporadicly, helps children make up their personality, that is games can maintain several ethics and moral values, e.g. honesty, loyalty, passion, etc., in them and by playing these games with children, children learn these lessons. In addition, games may teach children other lessons too. For example, I remember a game named Monoploy, in which participants compete in a made world financially, and the one who thrive in this world wins. I really learnt abstract such as transactions, dealing, and how to make and save money in this game.
Last but not the least, parents playing games with children strengthens the relationship they have with children, resulting in their children's trust. If parents spend enough time with their children, their children tend to tell their parent every single matter that happens for them, as the strong bond they have with their parents. For instance, I am now very close to my parents, specially to my mother, as she spent time with me a lot in her spare time, reading me stories and doing other activities with me. As a result, I consult my parents on most situations I have due to the mutual trust we have in each other.
In conclusion, spending the little time busy parents have playing games and sports with their children leads to a better bond with their children, as well as teaching valuable moral lessons and skills and also sports to their children. Not spend enough time with one's children may result in stunted and not-well-nourished personality in the children.
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Suggestion: betters; wells
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Message: The adverb 'Rarely' is usually not used at the beginning of a sentence.
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Suggestion: to abstract
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ir children. Not spend enough time with ones children may result in stunted and not-...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, e.g., first, if, may, really, second, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2397.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 498.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81325301205 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57039799559 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.439759036145 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 704.7 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.5829330487 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.0 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2941176471 20.6045352989 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8235294118 5.45110844103 199% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.466129565664 0.236089414692 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172888857705 0.076458572812 226% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120736129896 0.0737576698707 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.296032984342 0.150856017488 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116386041032 0.0645574589148 180% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.1575268817 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.21 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.247311828 185% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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