The charts summarise the weight measurements of people living in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts summarise the weight measurements of people living in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Given bar chart shows weight assessment of Charlestown inhabitant in 2015 & 1955, which has a stark difference.

If we talk about in the year of 2015, we can easily see there is constant and gradual increase in the obesity of Charlestown population. People of age 20-29 years are almost negligible in numbers, but at later stage of life these numbers are significantly high with striking increase of 60%. There is a erratic trend in overweight and underweight. People belong to 20-29 years tend to have ideal weight which decreases in numbers at the age of 60-69 years. Number of underweight is maximum at the age of 20-29 which steeply plunged to negligible at the age of 30-59.

Comparing weight assessment of inhabitants in 1955 from 2015, there is no obese people at the age of 20-39. Also, at the the later stage of life number of obese people are very less. Same erratic trend in overweight people is clearly visible with a minor difference of 5-10% at the age of 60-69 years. People with ideal weight rule the entire population as they are maximum in numbers at every age group. This shows, in 1955 people may have a very healthy lifestyle. Talking about underweight people in 1955, there is a curve where we can see gradual increase and then decrease

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 302, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...with striking increase of 60%. There is a erratic trend in overweight and underwe...
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Line 5, column 118, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...se people at the age of 20-39. Also, at the the later stage of life number of obese peo...
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Line 5, column 118, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...se people at the age of 20-39. Also, at the the later stage of life number of obese peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, then, talking about

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 33.7804878049 130% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1044.0 965.302439024 108% => OK
No of words: 220.0 196.424390244 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74545454545 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85128510684 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58209726884 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486363636364 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 314.1 283.868780488 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.3986769754 43.030603864 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0 112.824112599 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 22.9334400587 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.58333333333 5.23603664747 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135613385661 0.215688989381 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631674083817 0.103423049105 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514793874567 0.0843802449381 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124745240544 0.15604864568 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054547171853 0.0819641961636 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.2329268293 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 11.4140731707 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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