the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates information regarding the rate of female and male in Australia who doing regular physical activity in different age in 2010

Overall, most rates of women doing regular physical activity exceeded men’s and it experienced an upward trend by the age. But initially, the percentage of women was fall behind men’s rate. Both of two percentages had some fluctuations.

In age fifteen to twenty-four, men were more positive to carry out persistent exercise that the rate was 53.9% which was higher than women’s rate by approximately 5%. It deeply declines to 42.2 percent in age twenty-five to thirty-four and hitting the low-point of 39.5% in age 35 to 44. However, the figure showed a gradual rising trend to 43.1% in age forty-five to fifty-four and reaching 45.1% in age 55 to 64. Man who is beyond 64 years old had 46.7% consistent physical activity percentages.

About 47.7% of Australian women had regular physical activity in age fifteen to twenty-four while it was over 5 percent less than men. Then its outraced men's percentages. It grown steadily to 48.9% in age twenty-five to thirty-four and increase by 3.6% in age 35 to 44. The percentages gently incline to 53.3 percent in age forty-five to fifty-four and almost remained constant in age 55 to 64. Almost as same as men’s percentages, 47.1 percent of women had consistent exercise in age 65 and over.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, regarding, so, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1181.0 965.302439024 122% => OK
No of words: 234.0 196.424390244 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04700854701 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91114542567 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99928462019 2.65546596893 113% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 106.607317073 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551282051282 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 362.7 283.868780488 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 61.5573355138 43.030603864 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4166666667 112.824112599 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 22.9334400587 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.23603664747 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253867637197 0.215688989381 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0984481837355 0.103423049105 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0729734073376 0.0843802449381 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194874448108 0.15604864568 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0701394548675 0.0819641961636 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 61.2550243902 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 11.4140731707 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 40.7170731707 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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