Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Nowadays, in many countries, the population tends to concentrate in major cities, as there are more job opportunities than in villages. This, however, does not mean that cultural traditions are typical of them, and, in the next paragraphs, I will explain why I completely disagree with the presented claim
First of all, it is undeniable that the major cities of countries are cosmopolitan, because it is where multinational companies usually place their headquarters, and, as the world is ruled by wealthy people, this fact makes it interesting for international people to live there. This fact by itself completely dismantles the assumptions in which that claim is made, as a culture cannot be preserved by inverting money in the cosmopolitan places of a country.
As well as this, villages are usually places formed by people from the country where they are in, so it is highly probable that traditions correspond more to them rather than to big cities.
In conclusion, I am convinced that the claim made is not right, as the reason that is indicated in order to prove the claim may not hold true in most cases, because cultural traditions cannot be held in a cosmopolitan place.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, may, so, well, in conclusion, as well as, first of all, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 14.8657303371 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 58.6224719101 44% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 12.9106741573 8% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 990.0 2235.4752809 44% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 198.0 442.535393258 45% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 4.55969084622 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96756606019 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 215.323595506 55% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59595959596 0.4932671777 121% => OK
syllable_count: 310.5 704.065955056 44% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.2370786517 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 23.0359550562 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 110.606328933 60.3974514979 183% => OK
Chars per sentence: 198.0 118.986275619 166% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.6 23.4991977007 169% => OK
Discourse Markers: 17.0 5.21951772744 326% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152959289572 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077071106575 0.0831039109588 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0372803384418 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0864585895819 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0334405835124 0.0667264976115 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.9 14.1392134831 155% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.89 48.8420337079 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.5 12.1743820225 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 100.480337079 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.8971910112 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 11.2143820225 157% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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