The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Nowadays celebrities and famous people play a key role in the attitude and lives of people. They make great impacts and can influence the way people think and live. Some people hold the view that the opinion of famous people highly influences young people. However, some others take the opposite viewpoint. I agree with the former one. I will explicate my points of view through the following paragraphs.
The first noteworthy point to be mentioned is that, young people tend to show more interest to follow programs in which celebrities perform so that they know them better than their parents or older people and as a result are more influenced by them. older people prefer to spend their time by doing other activities such as reading books and newspapers or taking a walk in the park and are less interested in watching TV shows or the latest movies or series. Therefore, they don't know many celebrities or they might only hear about them from their children and eventually they don't pay attention to the celebrities’ opinions and are not affected by them. For instance, my friends and I are huge fans of the famous TV show Game of thrones, we always catch up together and talk about the show, the actors and we are highly interested in knowing more about the actor’s real life and how they think and live. since we are greatly influenced by their performance in the show we also tend to place value on the actor's attitude and lifestyle.
The second reason which is worth some words is that, younger people in general are more likely to be affected by others compared to older ones. In other words, as people age and gain different experiences through life, they develop a stable attitude which they rarely change. For instance, a survey conducted in my country reveals that, younger individuals are significantly more affected by other people's views and actions compared to their older peers. Hence it goes without saying that younger people are more likely to attach importance to the opinions of celebrities and value their points of view.
To wrap it up, it is my deep belief that, celebrities’ opinions make greater impact on younger people because they not only are more easily influenced by different points of views but also they tend to be more interested in the programs and shows and therefore are more eager to know about celebs or other famous people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, for instance, in general, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1980.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84107579462 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55787324754 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474327628362 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.421715623 48.9658058833 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.75 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5625 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6875 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324878595178 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109677267656 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0805923467844 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217476339644 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0334417307721 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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