Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
As the lives are more complicated than before, people need to make different decisions on each stage of life and these decisions can drastically affect them. when it comes to youngsters decision making, some people hold the opinion that nowadays, young people are less depended on their parents and they are able to make their own decisions better than in the past and I concur with this idea. In the ensuing lines, I will explain two reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
First, nowadays, young people are more concern about their independence than in the past. Decades ago, people used to live close together and after turning 18 children did not leave their families and they kept living adjacent them so parents believed it is their legal right to interfere in youngsters’ issues. today, people have to be separated soon because of college, job, and marriage. these days, so important is independence for youngsters that they need to practice it from young ages. Take my grandmother as an example, she told me her parents chose her husband and she did not see him before the wedding day, besides, she was not allowed to complain about it. On the contrary, today, no one allows other people to make such decisions for them and they firmly repudiate it.
Second, thanks to the new technologies young people access to various sources of information. In the past, people had no choice but to consult with older people as they were more experienced and involved in youngsters' lives. However, in today's world people can find their answers and different people with the same problem with a short a search on the Internet so they can study these cases and other people comments and analysis them to make the best decision. Moreover, parents are not accustomed to new challenges so young people have to look for their answers somewhere else. For instance, when I was going to university I had a hard time making a decision about the most appropriate university and city. my parents were not able to help me because of the lack of information so I started reading different forums and talking to other people with the same situation. Finally, I made the whole decision on my own and I am satisfied with it.
In conclusion, based on the aforementioned explanations and examples I believe that these days, young people are more dependent in making a decision in comparison with the past because they are more concern about their independence and more sources of information are available because of progress in the technology.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, however, if, look, moreover, second, so, for instance, in conclusion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2103.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9020979021 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66973758333 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487179487179 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 666.0 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.6373906135 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.705882353 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2352941176 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76470588235 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.470272784486 0.236089414692 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156477382187 0.076458572812 205% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101232479356 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.318242629927 0.150856017488 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0721174031151 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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