According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year , fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year.And yet the percentage of positive reviews about specific Super Screen movies have increased in this year.Clearly,the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough to our prospective viewers.Thus the problem lies not in the quality of our movies but with the lack of awareness that good movies are available.Super Screen Movies should thus allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching public through advertising.
The author claims, although the percentage of positive reviews about super screen movies increased but fewer people attended to watch these movies. based on this statement, the writer decided that the problem does not lies on the quality of movies rather the problem is the lack of awareness that good movies are producing and thus the writer asserted to allocate more money for advertising. The above comment is unconvincing to me because it is based on some flawed and incomplete information. In the following few paragraphs, I am going to elaborate my opinions about the recommendation.
Firstly, the writer mentioned that in the last year less number of viewers watched super screen movies, although the percentage of positive reviews of these movies increased. Relying on this information, the author concluded that the question is not about the quality of movies, rather the problem is related to advertising these movies. Due to poor marketing, the movies are reaching only to few people which resulted into the decline in number of viewer in the previous year. I have objection on this argument, if the positive reviews about these movies increased then we can not say that these movies are not reaching to public general people. At this age of information technology and globalization, it is not always necessary to go to theatre/cinema hall for watching movies. The viewers are building cinema hall like environment in their home with the help of modern inventions and the movies are available to the internet. this might result in decline of movie goers recent time.
Secondly, increasing the positive reviews does not indicate that the movies are of good quality. Usually, reviewer rated the movies based on trailer/limited information available on the internet. after the release of the movie, some people might to cinema hall and found the movie is not so good or the story is hackneyed. after that they might rated the movies poorly and this caused the decrease in number of movie goers. At this age of globalization and internet, people are well aware of what is happening around the world. Therefore, if one or few people's review is not good about something, then this have a multiplying effect on the sales of that good. That's why I am not convinced about the argument mentioned above.
Thirdly, I also believe that advertising of a certain product plays a pivotal role on the sales of that good. The company/firms/producers must have a strong advertising team for marketing their product. In spite of having an excellent advertising team, the movie will not attract significant number of viewers if the quality is poor. That's why the writers views of increasing the advertising expenditure is not convincing to me.
Finally, the author did not mention about any statistics on which he made the recommendation. Without proper statistical data, we can not define the course of action. At this age of modern technology, we can not be certain that people are not aware of the super screen movies. The people might be well concern but it is the question of quality which is not able to attract more customers. Piracy also might be another reason for declining number of movie goers declined last year.
The author's did not have any complete data on which he made the comment. Unless, we have complete information, we can not decide the course of action and if we do that this might be incorrect. That's why the above comment of increasing advertisement cost is not convincing to me.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 590 350
No. of Characters: 2853 1500
No. of Different Words: 224 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.928 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.836 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.588 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 214 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.692 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.331 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.293 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.507 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 149, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Based
... people attended to watch these movies. based on this statement, the writer decided t...
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Line 1, column 219, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'lie'
Suggestion: lie
...riter decided that the problem does not lies on the quality of movies rather the pro...
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Line 3, column 391, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...marketing, the movies are reaching only to few people which resulted into the decl...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he viewers are building cinema hall like environment in their home with the help ...
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...e movies are available to the internet. this might result in decline of movie goers ...
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...increasing the positive reviews does not indicate that the movies are of good qua...
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Line 5, column 696, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
...good. Thats why I am not convinced about the argument mentioned above. Thirdl...
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...keting their product. In spite of having an excellent advertising team, the movie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, well, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 28.8173652695 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 55.5748502994 148% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2925.0 2260.96107784 129% => OK
No of words: 586.0 441.139720559 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99146757679 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92010537223 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83563785768 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 204.123752495 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.41638225256 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 925.2 705.55239521 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 19.7664670659 152% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.8124758953 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5333333333 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.93333333333 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269413614828 0.218282227539 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737163306491 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0773887353708 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141458945936 0.128457276422 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0666303795828 0.0628817314937 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.3799401198 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 98.500998004 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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