Parents of obese children should be punished for making their children fat.
Do you agree or disagree ?
Parents who have fat children should be given punishment for making their children obese. I do not agree with the above statement because i feel that obesity can be hereditary or metabolic diseases and some parents might not have control over such complex problems due to various reasons and lack of knowledge.
Firstly, obesity is a diseases and this could be hereditary or metabolic and not just by over eating or over feeding, so parents cannot be directly blamed for such a complex health issues in their children. Moreover, punishing a father or a mother who is already struggling to make their child loss weight is completely illogical, and hence i strongly suggest that they should be give support rather than punishment considering their circumstances.
Secondly, not everybody has the facilities to take professional opinion from doctors or physical trainers to make a child fit. For instance people who live in remote areas or villages might not have the needed facilities to help the children, and thus accusing the parents in theses place would be foolish on the part of the government.
Lastly, parents who do not posses the required knowledge to understand the ill effects of obesity can be a major problem and thus simply punishing them would not have any positive change in the society unless we create awareness among the community.
To conclude, i total disagree to statement that a parent should be punished for the reason that his or her child is over weight. Obesity is mostly a diseases and cannot be always connected to over eating or over feeding and some times this could just be due to bad location, poor facilities and lack of knowledge and awareness among the family members.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, lastly, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1429.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97909407666 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63209458652 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536585365854 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.5577053208 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.777777778 106.682146367 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8888888889 20.7667163134 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.88888888889 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.434939617222 0.244688304435 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.191691767744 0.084324248473 227% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148812312812 0.0667982634062 223% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238874504332 0.151304729494 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121852167222 0.056905535591 214% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 50.2224549098 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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