the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Societies are made of people and young people are the future of societies and they decided the path of future events. The best way of using these young people is preparing them for leadership in government and industry with a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Primarily our society is a competition based, either in the field of education or in the job sector, everyone is on a rat race. In this age of competition, we forget the basic principle of our society, which is helping others and make society better for everyone. This could be achieved only be cooperation, not compete against each other. Cooperation is a difficult quality to achieved and it has to be earned by empathy and strengthening the bond with each other. We can achieve anything if stayed as a whole.
The young people are the future of our society and if we can install them in government and in the industry with cooperation ten they can achieve a society where everyone could be equal. They could help each other without being envy others. For example, a bunch of stick could not break easily unlike a single stick.
On the other hand, people can argue that competition is not always unhealthy. Sometimes, proper competition brings out the latent capacity of a person. Competition could be used as choosing the better option. But, our society takes the competition on the next step and many beliefs and critical thinking diminished over the idea of competing and on the race on the come being top.
At the epilogue of the topic, I would say that competition is a milieu that could be created by cooperation of each other and by motivate and inspire them by setting an equal involvement in our young people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 208, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... equal involvement in our young people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, then, as to, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1399.0 2235.4752809 63% => OK
No of words: 294.0 442.535393258 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75850340136 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68067135049 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 215.323595506 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506802721088 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 704.065955056 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.4411434603 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2666666667 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73333333333 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272571197862 0.243740707755 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0923244496528 0.0831039109588 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118906101407 0.0758088955206 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168975027261 0.150359130593 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.143999447367 0.0667264976115 216% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 100.480337079 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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