The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.

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The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.

ne graph illustrates the proportion of visitors to UK who went Brighton attractions between 1980 and 2010.

At first glance, it was noticeable that every lines of the attraction had shown some fluctuation, expect festival. The percentage of tourists who went to festival had reached the highest point on 1980, however had declined to below 30% in the aforesaid period. pier, on the other hand, had the least visitors in the first 20 years, but since 2000, visitors to pier had risen suddenly and reached a peak which was 22% approximately.

As the graph demonstrates, the art gallery had the best point in year of 1985 which was almost 40%. For the next 25 years, it had dipped significantly and become the least popular. In addition, Pavilion, the second popular in 1980 had surged, which had shown upward and downward trend but still remained the most popular attraction among others.

To sum up, it was evident that tourists were fond of shopping than visiting others attraction since 1990.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Ne
ne graph illustrates the proportion of vis...
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Line 3, column 262, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Pier
...d to below 30% in the aforesaid period. pier, on the other hand, had the least visit...
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Line 7, column 77, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...sts were fond of shopping than visiting others attraction since 1990.
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, still, in addition, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 837.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 168.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98214285714 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63366456842 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619047619048 0.547539520022 113% => OK
syllable_count: 232.2 283.868780488 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.6040744836 43.030603864 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.625 112.824112599 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.625 5.23603664747 203% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121256005215 0.215688989381 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599213101794 0.103423049105 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0373788017087 0.0843802449381 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0833463071305 0.15604864568 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295551425543 0.0819641961636 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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