Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful
educational tool. Others, however, believe that videos games are having an
adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of
video games outweigh the benefits?
Some individuals contend that video games is one of the beneficial tools to develop personal development and a marvelous way to relax while others argue that they pose a threat to gamers. From my perspective, I totally agree with the latter idea.
On the one hand, it is said that opting for video games will allow people to reap several benefits. Firstly, games enable the human race to unwind after depleted classes without causing harmful consequences. Indeed, when they are engaged in playing a video game, the only thing they can do is using a keyboard and an optical mouse to control everything on the screen, which barely puts anyone at risk. Secondly, this recreational entertainment makes a huge contribution to broaden young people’s horizons. There is a considerable number of educational games which are developed to provide players with a massive source of information from different fields, fostering human beings to learn more in order to take their understanding even further.
On the other hand, it is inevitable that spending a substantial amout of time keeping eyes glued to the screen will be harmful. The problem which has been increasingly ubiquitous so far is the addiction to video games of teenagers. Without parent’s proper surveillance, people aged 10 to 16 have a tendency to immerse in online games continuously without paying attention to fulfil homeworks, resulting in abject grades at schools. Not only that but being addicted to games will also threaten people’s health. Should an idividual sits in front of a screen for an extended period, they are likely to suffer from various detrimental diseases. As a result, they are deprived of chances to accumulate knowledge while being at a hospital dealing with illness.
In conclusion, although video games bring benefits to players, they has a negative effect on the lifestyle in the long run.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 69, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
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Line 7, column 125, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ffect on the lifestyle in the long run.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1593.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18892508143 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91670121274 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638436482085 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7873027006 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.785714286 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9285714286 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261105274496 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861847390864 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665146209118 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162843986499 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392473642604 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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