The role of education is to prepare children for the modern world. School should cut art and music out of the curriculum so that children can focus on useful subjects such as information technology. To what extent do you agree?
Knowledge is necessary in everyone career to shape their paths in life according to the persons will. It is argued that studies play vital part in designing kid for the up-to-date globe. Therefore, school should remove social subjects like art and music from the syllabus which will help students to concentrate only on valuable subjects. I completely disagree, because the balance in society so that people can celebrate their success as well.
The school should be taught all subjects equally although science is dominant as compare with other subject but obsoleting other subjects like arts and culture will demolish the career of those who are good in creativity and language, so it will be against their will to remove art music from the school syllabus. For instance, A. R. Rahman is a world known musician from India and his traditional music has always won the hearts of millions around the world, therefore removing music from studies by government will lose the opportunity to give birth a great talent. Hence, balance is mandatory to provide all the students equal chance to improve their skills.
Another factor is the only keeping useful subjects like science will make the world monotonous and less energetic to their goals. The balance of success and energy is vital for the modern society, so that if people can also rejoice the achievements with the help of music. For instance, subjects like yoga has always shown the world how to remain active and fit for the purpose by incorporating exercises in daily basis, which will make the life healthier and boost up for their goals and targets.
In conclusion, society with only science students will lack the balance of mixed culture and people will feel depressed at early stages. Hence I believe that all the subjects should be their in school curriculum, which will help them to study as well as enjoy together to have joyful life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1584.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96551724138 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42755106972 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542319749216 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.9800977977 49.4020404114 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.846153846 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5384615385 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30769230769 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173151146059 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0668556539102 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463034625988 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115366592878 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363186767582 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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