Some people that the best way to overcome obesity is increasing students awareness. Do you agree or disagree?
The number of obese and over wight for the wide range of humans have been increased enormously these days due to a lot of factors. In spite of that some people believes that the effective ways to protect & fight this disease are to provide more obesity awareness sessions for the students in the school. In my point of view , I totally agree with this point. However, I also think that we should focus in other attractive platform like the social media.
The associated diseases accompanied with the obesity is extremely dangerous and can led to serious complications in the future. A lot of obese and over wight are suffering from hypertension and increase the level of cholesterol. In addition they will have some psychological problems.
Nowadays the technologies play's a great and major role in delivering some health messages. Therefore , we should utilize it in a suitable way and take a benefit in order to deliver an obesity awareness advices through it. And the most common pathway is the social media like facebook and twitter this facilities will cover a wide rang of people.
Certainly we also should straight our education programs by giving the pupils an adequate information about the risk of obesity and how we can manage our lifestyle in good way.
In conclusion , the obesity is an silent killer and can affect our society. Therefore we should take care of it and fight it in all possible ways.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1180.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 241.0 315.596192385 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89626556017 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67704699089 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.597510373444 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 387.0 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7440394347 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.7692307692 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5384615385 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61538461538 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175506718164 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0569306664252 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498698222634 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0889188539335 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0488190872497 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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