The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
“Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and
concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village
rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children
living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more
time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This
research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid
and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The
interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will
establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other
island cultures.”
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the
argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The following argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument is based on the unwarranted assumptions that the culture of Tertia will be same despite the twenty years time difference, concluded that Dr Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture and method of observation are invalid.
The argument fails to provide any justification that the culture of Tertia village will be same in terms of time. For one, the culture of rearing children may be changed now than Dr Field's time as the interview had been done twenty years ago.More significantly, the people of island of Tertia may treat children in a different ways than 20 years ago which cannot make Dr. Field's observation invalid.
The argument also do not provide the information of how many people surveyed in both times. It may happen of conducting of less number of family participated in survey for both cases.Had the argument provided exact information about number of families covered by the survey then it can be justified the validity of Dr. Field's conclusion.
Finally, the argument claims that the interview-centereed method that the graduate students of author is currently using in Tertia which will establish a much more accurate understanding of child rearing tradition. However, the author do not clearify the limit of much more accuracy which is in fact a vague term. Thus this vague term cannot justify the validity of Dr Field's method.
Because the argument makes several unwarranted assumptions, it fails to make a convincing case that Dr Field's conclusion about Tertia child tradition and method of observation is invalid compared to the author's observation and method.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 270 350
No. of Characters: 1383 1500
No. of Different Words: 133 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.054 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.122 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.836 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.214 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.421 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.716 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
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... observation is invalid compared to the authors observation and method.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, may, so, then, thus, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1411.0 2260.96107784 62% => OK
No of words: 268.0 441.139720559 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26492537313 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89989235941 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 204.123752495 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507462686567 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 705.55239521 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 84.1168829665 57.8364921388 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.1 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8 23.324526521 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186560856587 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0730112760211 0.0743258471296 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678537943846 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111528876594 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632019150738 0.0628817314937 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.3799401198 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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