Some people argue that immigrants should adopt the local culture when immigrating to a new country. An alternative view is that they can adapt to new environment by establishing a minority community. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is an indisputable fact that the last 20 years has seen a dramatic increase in the number of immigrants. There remains some disagreement as to whether immigrants should stay in small groups and follow their own social norms; however, in this essay I intend to contend that it is the responsibility of immigrants to observe the accepted rules of behavior in their adopted countries, both written and unwritten.
On the one hand, it is an undeniable fact that there are a multitude of minority groups in different parts of the world. A particularly salient example is that in America, some areas such as Little Saigon and China Town are well-known for the traditions and customs of Vietnamese and Chinese, correspondingly. These immigrants are inclined to use their own languages and follow their own social norms. Although cultural diversity could increase the color and vibrancy, it is my belief that distinctions undermine a society by alienating migrants from the locals. These Vietnamese and Chinese, therefore, rarely participated in communal activities.
On the other hand, if migrants are willing to adapt to cultural norms in adopted countries, they are more likely to facilitate societal cohesion. A specifically notable example is that the young generation tended to learn new languages and adopted the patterns of behavior and societal rules in their destination countries and they literally became an indispensable part of these nations. It is my belief that similarities are inclined to unite people, whereas differences have a tendency to divide. In this sense, too much cultural diversity is detrimental to both migrants and the locals; and a strong society is a homogenous society with shared values, goals, and beliefs.
By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that migrants should contemplate adapting to new societal norms and culture in their adopted countries. Whilst the borders between nations become gradually blurred, there will be a large influx of immigrants to some countries. Therefore, research into this phenomenon would be warranted.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 141, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...grants. There remains some disagreement as to whether immigrants should stay in small groups ...
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Line 2, column 564, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this Vietnamese' or ''?
Suggestion: This Vietnamese;
...by alienating migrants from the locals. These Vietnamese and Chinese, therefore, rarely particip...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, therefore, well, whereas, as to, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1759.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3303030303 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00912142558 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539393939394 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.9326251329 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.642857143 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5714285714 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178812671585 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0529320734123 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453777714381 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110814947545 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278590801922 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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