"In order to relieve Briggsville’s notorious traffic congestion, Mayor Harrison Smith Jones plans to build a multi-million dollar subway system. The subway will run through the major downtown areas, a part of the town where buses serve as the only form of public transportation. For years, residents have been complaining both about inconsistent buses, and the general lack of safety while riding the buses. Additionally, the subway will be running twenty-four hours a day. Since motorists will spend less time in traffic, Mayor Harrison Smith Jones expects to see an immediate increase in worker productivity, which will improve the economy of Briggsville."
The argument is strongly based on the assumption that people would prefer travelling through the subway transportation system. It is also based on the assumption that the work productivity of the city Briggsville absolutely relies on the ease of transportation or the transportation facility. Further, it states that the general lack of safety would also be solved as people would spend less time stuck in traffic. The assumptions which the statement is based on could prove to be absurd. There is a high chance that any of the above mentioned assumptions go wrong and the whole system does not meet its requirements.
Firstly, the statement does not even mention the problems that could be faced during the construction of the multi-million project. X. Construction works are prone to being sporadic which means it would take years to build an effective transportation facility.
Secondly, people of the city Briggsville are accustomed to the existing transportation system which would take a lot of time to let people adjust. A lot of people would be loath to travel under the artificial lights.
Furthermore, even if the subways transportation system is successfully constructed, relating it directly to the rise in the work productivity is quite a histrionic statement.
There could be several other factors contributing to the low productivity of workers. Workers may well be lazy to get off their bed or low wages could deplete their enthusiasm and dedication towards work. There could be hundreds of reasons for bad work productivity.
Another ridiculous statement that the Mayor makes in that the economy is directly related to the work productivity. Government's other policies could hamper the economy as well. An existing war with some other country could be a part of such an economy. Lower amount of taxes would mean the government is not getting enough money to run the country. People could spend every night drinking and partying if the food and alcoholic drinks are cheaper in the town.
In a nutshell, there could be several factors for poor productivity and bad economy. Instead of relying solely on the transportation system for the crisis, the Government should analyse the functioning of the city in a careful manner.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 364 350
No. of Characters: 1843 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.368 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.063 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.974 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.946 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.578 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 26, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'subways'' or 'subway's'?
Suggestion: subways'; subway's
...al lights. Furthermore, even if the subways transportation system is successfully c...
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Line 11, column 260, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Lower) must be used with a third-person verb: 'amounts'.
Suggestion: amounts
...uld be a part of such an economy. Lower amount of taxes would mean the government is n...
^^^^^^
Line 12, column 215, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...uld analyse the functioning of the city in a careful manner.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1891.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 364.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19505494505 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04020849766 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497252747253 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.2347709485 57.8364921388 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.55 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0736303398849 0.218282227539 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0242514596086 0.0743258471296 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.027065936359 0.0701772020484 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0388981320422 0.128457276422 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0234488828146 0.0628817314937 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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