Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
A number of skills should be mastered over years in order to write a coherent essay. First, one should learn how to identify each letter of the alphabet individually. Then, one learns that those letters should be placed in specific ways to form words. In increasingly complex processes, one learns how to write sentences, paragraphs, and finally how to write an essay through the organization of his arguments in paragraphs, following a train of thought.
In a similar fashion, people can only achieve their goals by designing and following a plan with steps that ultimately lead to the accomplishment of their objective. However, one must take into account that it is necessary to develop certain skills along the way, and that many of those skills require the mastery of certain pre-requisites. For instance, one does not learn how to swim without learning how to escape from sinking beforehand.
In this sense, I disagree completely with the statement that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits. Formal education has a pivotal role in enabling people to develop basic skills that help them identify and pursue their aspirations.
One could argue that formal education discourages free thinking due to its reliance on lectures based on a fixed curriculum. However, this objection does not take into account that one of the role of schools is to provide a basic repertoire of general knowledge to students -- and this objective creates the necessity of a basic minimum curriculum for everyone.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "In a similar fashion" with adverb for "similar"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...raphs, following a train of thought. In a similar fashion, people can only achieve their goals by...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, then, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 19.5258426966 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1275.0 2235.4752809 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 247.0 442.535393258 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16194331984 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.55969084622 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82904501689 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 215.323595506 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582995951417 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 398.7 704.065955056 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4078991242 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.909090909 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4545454545 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27272727273 5.21951772744 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115923604027 0.243740707755 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521486099433 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0973437389446 0.0758088955206 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0938543623638 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126753880376 0.0667264976115 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 100.480337079 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.