The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can deny the importance of friendship in the life. In my firm belief, this assertion is not true at all. In my view, it is more important to have an ability to make many new friends easily than the ability to preserve friendships with small number of people over a long period of time for two major reasons, and I will these interesting idea in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, I think every person need to have an ability to make a new group of friends. Most of the time in our life we need to find new friends in different situations. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. For instance, when I was 15, I had to go to some school outside my own city. I was really worried because I did not know anyone in that city. I was really sad to say goodbye to my old friends and I did not want to leave them. At the end, I went to that city and I got upset. I did not know what to do. In that time I tried to find some new friends in order to made myself feel good again. I found three friends there and as a result, I got more relax and happy than I was before. I think this example could vividly shows you how much is crucial to have an ability to make new friends in the time if need.
Secondly, I think every friendship is some sort of unique experience and every one should be open to take some risk. For example, one of my friend spent one semester in the abroad university. She said that it was a good chance for her to feel independent from her own family. While she was there, she found one new friend. They became best friend in a really short period of time. Finally, they tried to run a new computer company. They wanted to make some application for computers. They begun this crazy adventure once I heard that my friend said that this friendship was the preface of something wild and important in her life. As a result, they got reach and my friend could reach to the life that she wanted. Example like this could clearly show us the importance of taking risk in life and in friendship.
In the light of above mentioned reasons, I think making new friends is more critical than maintain old friends and I think that need to make a friend in new situation and be open to take risk are two major reasons on this topic.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...with small number of people over a long period of time for two major reasons, and I will these...
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'show'
Suggestion: show
...ore. I think this example could vividly shows you how much is crucial to have an abil...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ey became best friend in a really short period of time. Finally, they tried to run a new compu...
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Line 5, column 490, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'began'?
Suggestion: began
...ke some application for computers. They begun this crazy adventure once I heard that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, really, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, sort of, as a result, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1875.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.20403587444 4.8611393121 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30601974857 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457399103139 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.9 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.3513036392 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.0 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.84 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.32 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315607331955 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0797776348555 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0954030633463 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223208487168 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0972568879405 0.0645574589148 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.3 11.7677419355 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 58.1214874552 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.78 10.9000537634 62% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.5 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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