The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australians men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australians men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates the rate of performing daily exercises, divided by gender at Australia in 2010. It is clear to see that female at the age of 45 to 54 appeared to be the most hard-worked, while the highest rate of men lay down at the group of under 25 years old.

More specifically, the percentage of Australian men doing physical-related activities in 2010 at the range from 15 to 24 years old was 52.8 percent. The working age saw a downward trend of doing activities, fell from the aforementioned peak to almost 40 percent, nearly one and a half time less. However, as getting closer to the retirement age, the rate increased significantly. In detail, the difference of nearly 10 percent was achieved, showing that when there was less work, men really kept an eye on their health.

On the other hand, a hugely contrast trend happened to women. At the most efficient working age, women liked exercises. 53.3 percent was the number in 2010. Though, both younger and older tended to did less, but not as clear as men. Only small fluctuations occurred, around 6%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 20, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('hugely') instead an adjective, or a noun ('contrast') instead of another adjective.
...n their health. On the other hand, a hugely contrast trend happened to women. At the most ef...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, really, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 891.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 187.0 196.424390244 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76470588235 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82769907645 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 106.607317073 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.673796791444 0.547539520022 123% => OK
syllable_count: 260.1 283.868780488 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.2091198848 43.030603864 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.0 112.824112599 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 22.9334400587 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54545454545 5.23603664747 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165387852972 0.215688989381 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0573012053102 0.103423049105 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0364871027163 0.0843802449381 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10536130918 0.15604864568 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0193865407621 0.0819641961636 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.2329268293 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 61.2550243902 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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