The city council of Smithville has recommended making
changes to police procedures to improve the visibility of the
police force. These changes include hiring more police officers,
budgeting more funds for police overtime, and directing
officers to patrol significantly more often on foot rather than
from their patrol cars. These improvements in visibility would
significantly lower the crime rate in Smithville and make its
citizens feel safer
To state that increasing surveillance can lower crime rate in the state of Smithville might seem reasonable at a first glance. But the writer makes many unstated assumptions in making the conclusion. We might need several evidence related to visibility of police forece and crime rate to conclude accurately.
The author does not cite any evidence that correlates increase in number of personnel and crime rate. It is possible that even an increased number personnel can prove insufficient to reduce crime rate while having a negative effect on citizen's collective psyche. Criminals always find loop holes to commit crimes while the ordinary citizens might feel alarmed by the increase in number of police officers. If there is an evidence strongly corrrelating the number of police personnel and decrease in crime rate in a similar state then the conculsion may be deemed valid.
Coming to the second assumption: allocating funds to make officers work overtime. This may or may not prove effective. In fact, this may have negative effect in police officer's efficiency of surveillance and overall abiltiy to do their duty. This may lead on-duty casulaties on the officers' part when confronted with criminals. Coming to the third assumption; increasing on-foot surveillance. There was no data presented to show that more on-foot surveillance would decrease crime rate. It is possible that more on-foot surveillance might deter criminals to commit less crimes. But, it also can facilitate evasion of criminals after they commit crime if they have vehicles for evasion. So if there is strong data correlating on-foot surveillance and decrease crime rate, the author's conclusion may be deemed reasonable.
So decrease crime rate in the state of Smithville may or may not be connected to the factors related to police visiblity. It could be connected to more deep and fundamental factors which need to be addressed. Only then can both crime rate come down and citizens feel secure simultaneously. The concerned stakeholders in the state of Smithville must be skeptical of the conclsuion stated in the prompt in the absence of above stated evidence.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 344 350
No. of Characters: 1775 1500
No. of Different Words: 170 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.307 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.16 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.8 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.636 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.51 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 215, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[8]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun evidence seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some evidence'.
Suggestion: some evidence
...in making the conclusion. We might need several evidence related to visibility of police forece ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 567, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun crimes is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...illance might deter criminals to commit less crimes. But, it also can facilitate ev...
^^^^
Line 9, column 587, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...criminals to commit less crimes. But, it also can facilitate evasion of criminals...
^^
Line 9, column 778, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...rveillance and decrease crime rate, the authors conclusion may be deemed reasonable. ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, then, third, while, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 344.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28488372093 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86405374958 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.799237796 57.8364921388 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.9 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.3 5.70786347227 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.20758483034 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 6.88822355289 232% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104712215214 0.218282227539 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0357074001271 0.0743258471296 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0363742192302 0.0701772020484 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0692969049347 0.128457276422 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00524698606916 0.0628817314937 8% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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