Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
I assume life is hard, realy hard. People must be so powerful to be happy in their life. On of the most periods of life is adulthood. There are many ways to be happy in life when someone passes adult era. In order to be powerful in life, people must expand their experience in childlihood and adolescence. Some people pressum that one of the best ways to help their childern is to take part-time job when they are teanager. In contrast others do not agree with them. From my perspective, I agree with the claim and I think one of the best ways is to take part-time job for two main reasons.
First, teanagers experince harsh conditions and because of the circumstances they will make a good future. For example I vivdly remember when I was a child my father suggested me to take a job. He believed that it is necessary for a teanager to work to ontain his niche. I did so and I used to work at a reastaurant as a acounter in holidays. I went to work from 7 am to all the day 10 pm. I always had to do math. I slept scarcely rather than my peers which did what they wanted at that time. I no longer work in a reastaurant but the work ahs had its effects on me. Due to that hard situations, now, I undergo every hard circumstances.
Second, when a teenager work, he will care about his money. Indeed, in adulthood, he has sufficient experiences because he has worked befors. For example whne my brother was a child he worked a lot in many various places like supermarket, bank, bus station, and so forth. He knew that he must not spend his money on worthless things. He must care about both his money and his time. In other words, he look at every problem and the first topic entailed his mind was economical matter. Now, he has become one of the moste important economics consultant of ministary of economics. He has become a successful person because he has passed many situations with a string hardship.
In order to wrap up, our charectristic is made according to our past experiences. So, it is crucial for every one to undergoes hard situations like take part-time job. Because it not only makes people powerful, it also makes people to care about their money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, so, for example, i think, in contrast, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.42144638404 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60228710651 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511221945137 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.3430082115 48.9658058833 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 63.3214285714 100.406767564 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3214285714 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.17857142857 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216674914205 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608364077503 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0838349447017 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141515481006 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127078171939 0.0645574589148 197% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.5 11.7677419355 55% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.76 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.