People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Although, factors which are not in control of one's own self play an important role in shaping the behavior of a person, it would be incorrect to attribute a person's behavior completely to forces not of their own making. A person's behavior is largely shaped by how he/she perceives the environment around them in their early stages of life. hence, a person's behaviour is largely linked to his/her own decisions and choices.
Let's begin with the first example of a family living in the rural area of Surat, India. The family comprised of four members, two kids raju and ramu, and their father ravi and mother Sudha. ravi being a drunkard, set a bad example for his kids growing up. however, his elder son raju, observed his father's behavior and realized that, his father's habits were detrimental and he should never become like his father. hence, raju attended school regularly, and regularly stood first in his class during examinations. he would later become a software engineer and work in a multi-national company. Alternatively, the younger son, ramu, was influenced by his father's behaviour in a negative manner and picked up all the bad habits from his drunk father. ramu was regularly involved in fights with other kids in the school and picked up negative habits from his father such as drinking alcohol, smoking cigarettes and dealing drugs. hence, ramu was negatively influenced by his father and did not realize the future implications of such behavior. ramu was later arrested by the police authorities at the age of 22, when he had been involved in gang fights and was convicted for murder. Therefore, this example provides us reason to believe that a person's behavior is not necessarily determined by forces not of their own making. Rather, a person's behavior is largely shaped by how he perceives the surrounding environment and it is based on his own choices and actions.
Alternatively, in some cases people don't have a choice in shaping their behavior. For example, a person born in the family of beggars will not have many opportunities to change his/her behaviour. The kids are usually exposed to a detrimental environment from which they cannot escape from, and spend their rest of the life begging or performing crimes. Thus, the behavior of such kids is largely shaped by external factors not in their control.
To summarize, people's behavior is determined by their own perception of things happening around them, and it is their choice to follow the path of right or wrong. however, in some extreme cases, where people don't have much say in their fate, their behavior is mainly determined by forces not of their own making.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...ly to forces not of their own making. A persons behavior is largely shaped by how he/sh...
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Message: Consider using 'the surrounding environment'?
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Suggestion: Hence
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
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Suggestion: Let's
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Suggestion: persons'; person's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, such as, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2225.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 446.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98878923767 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65408731067 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486547085202 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 698.4 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2496869105 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.952380952 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2380952381 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.19047619048 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 7.80617977528 231% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 10.2758426966 19% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165475172537 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589015668917 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565809225692 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132263869298 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468987653426 0.0667264976115 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.