Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this progressive and sophistocated world, different people and different relationships have a vide effect on human's life. with this in mind, children benefit from different relationships that have crucial impact on their personality and also on their future. When it comes to this point, poeple have some debates as to whether student are more influenced by their taechers or by their friends. Actually, I agree with the later group and in what follows, two reasons will be discissed to shed light on this idea.
First reason coming to mind to substantiate my stand point is that friend relationship in the childhood is very firm, because children are more sensitive at this ages and they are more warm blooded. In addition, classmates are in the same ages not only they can underestand each other better but also they have similar thoughts actions. Therefore, they are more rely on each other to solve their problems which they face in this period of their life. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in elementary school, I talked with my friend every time and try to mimic their action because I thoght that their action was very worthwhile. We had a great influence on each other because we were very close.
Another equally noteworthy point corroborating my stance is that in school children spend more time with their friends than the teacher. spending more time with the friends make their relationships strong. They go to the school with them; also, return to the home in the same way and speak about different issues. Psychologits state that peolpe who spend more time with each other, unexpectedly, recieve their friend way of thinking. Because of that our prophet Mohammad sayed that people should be careful about choosing their friends. When I was in school, I spend my times with two friends and after a while, I spoke with their acsent.
To sum up based on all argumentations stataed above, children are more influenced by their friends because they are in the same level of their life and they spend more time of the day with each other. Therefore, they immitate their classmate activities and minds more than other people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, so, therefore, while, as to, in addition, to sum up, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92682926829 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57963264707 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50135501355 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4162147479 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55555555556 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26541999491 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102802006868 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642274343675 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184246195492 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291923784278 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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