Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations. Skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork should not be taught at school as it is better to learn these from family and friends. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is believed that school systems should help children to have a good grasp of academic knowledge and succeed in formal examinations, whereas subjects such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork which are unnecessary in the schools. I totally disagree with the point of view.
Firstly, it is clear that each class has only a few high-flyers who can achieve the top of study, while the majority of children have just desired to make the grade. Consequently, if we concentrate only on academic subjects, a large number of children who fall behind with their studies would miss promotion opportunities because of the lack of other skills. Meanwhile, if schools organise more extra-curriculum activities to instruct children other necessary skills such as cooking and sewing and even repairing simple electrical items, they will have more choices to move up the career ladder after graduating.
Secondly, children actually need more skills to live in harmony with others than completing examination in their class. In a sensible way, not all children have a supportive family in which they are taught skills to take care of themselves such as working mothers and single parent households. In formative years, If children are guided DIY skills, they are very influential in shaping children’s personality which enable them to be independent on expensive fast foods and even being ready to support their own parents. It is sure that only one place where many of children can study these important domestic skills is school.
In conclusion, I totally disagree that we should follow the educational perspective which only concentrates on academic subjects and getting success in examinations. I believe that domestic skills is essential to be taught in schools
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Message: Consider replacing "In a sensible way" with adverb for "sensible"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... completing examination in their class. In a sensible way, not all children have a supportive fam...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...elieve that domestic skills is essential to be taught in schools
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, whereas, while, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1486.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30714285714 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94014264544 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610714285714 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.2232022803 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.090909091 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4545454545 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.45454545455 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207289697525 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0872884610481 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742534408572 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158676342319 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0852479917731 0.056905535591 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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