My dream jobs
My biggest dreams are being a successful businessman or designer. I followed a lot of TV shows about successful people in business, fashionistas, designers, and stylists, and I had had chances to meet some of them in real life. They are my true inspiration to find future careers; they are smart, creative, and have a lot of daring ideas. As learning from their roll-models, I gained more knowledge and updated more new fashion trends around the world. Moreover, business and design are free works; people who work in those industries need to travel and communicate a lot. As a fashion and travel lover, I am eager to visit more places and learn new culture’s patterns.
A businessman is a person who works in commerce, especially at the executive level, and they are brilliant and daring. Moreover, they have to change their strategy regularly to approach more customers. The businessman is good at understanding his/her customers, that is the critical point of trading. However, if I want to work in business, I need to be good at math and marketing. Marketing is a subject that teaches us how to explain our products to everyone, how to increase the ranking of each product.
Fashion design is the art of applying design, aesthetics, and natural beauty to clothing and its accessories. Similar to the businessman, the designer also needs to be creative in their work. Notably, the designer has inspiration from the surrounding environment, for example, from their friends, family, pets, or only from the road of the countryside that they have been. Some designers have ideas audaciously, their initial is building their work, and very few of it has been affected by their audience’s opinion.
To persuade those two jobs, I am thinking of opening a fashion brand so that I can combine design and business in the future. Besides design clothes, I will also match some accessories, bags, and shoes. My product collection target is friendly and suitable for everyone, so my customers can find themselves being trendy, style, and comfortable in each of my designs. After the first few stores, I will start a professional fashion company to support my artwork. I hope my company will not only contribute to improving the outlook of people but also help to develop the Vietnamese garment industry.
Some people think that business and design are free and accessible works. But they don’t know how stressful that people in those two fields have to suffer, for example, you have to read a lot to be innovative to adapt to new trends and then invent new items. Moreover, funding is always a big struggle for a young startup. However, giving up is not in my dictionary; I will do step by step to conquer the issue. And I believe one day, I can make my dream come true.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 411, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
...designers have ideas audaciously, their main focus is building their work, and very few of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, look, moreover, so, then, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 10.4138276553 259% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 24.0651302605 224% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2272.0 1615.20841683 141% => OK
No of words: 471.0 315.596192385 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82377919321 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85919870629 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 176.041082164 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522292993631 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 699.3 506.74238477 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 5.43587174349 350% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 11.0 0.809619238477 1359% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2127049528 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.88 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.84 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.08 7.06120827912 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 8.67935871743 219% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114135172212 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0332115271844 0.084324248473 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672172685214 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0643192842023 0.151304729494 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621718359617 0.056905535591 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 78.4519038076 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.