Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
advertisement has a central role in a company's success in selling its products. one issue that has to be considered by them is that each advertisement is appropriate for a particular range of ages. For instance, younger people have different desires from older ones. some companies try to set their advertisements to attract young children. these advertisements seem to have some advantages for the company and some disadvantageous for families. Although companies advocate advertising for children at a young age, I think that its disadvantages overweigh its advantageous for a couple of reasons which I will elucidate in the following paragraphs.
The first point I want to make is that advertisements have some bad effects on the family. To clarify, when a child watches an amazing advertisement which introduces an expensive toy, he will force his family to buy that toy. Whereas, they might not have enough money to purchase that. As a result, it may lead to some conflicts between family members. For instance, I remember that when I was 4 years old, I tried to urge my father to buy a particular toy I saw on advertisement while he had no extra money to do so because of our poor financial condition at that time. Consequently, my dad was always under pressure since I was fighting with him to satisfy my needs. now, I regret those days and had I understood that situation I would have never asked my father to do things he was not able to. so it is not always moral to set the advertisement's goal directly on children.
In addition to its bad effects on the family, it seems immoral to me that a company tries to get children's attention to its products. some companies try to use imaginary things in their advertisement so that it makes their product attractive to children. As we know, children are sensitive to what they see and they may believe that those imaginary things really exist. this makes it easy for those companies to make children's parents buy the product. For example, now there is an advertisement about a bear which speaks on television, but we all know that it is just a simple doll. In this way, companies try to deceive children and sell their products through this way. these kinds of advertisements can make prodigious profits for the company but may make serious problems as mentioned previously. With this in mind, companies should not point their advertising purposes to young children.
Given these points, we can conclude that advertising for children is not a good idea since it can cause problems for families and it is an immoral way of gaining profits. Were I the head of the company, I would not allow to use advertisements aiming for young children. I hope that companies stop advertising in such a way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, may, really, so, whereas, while, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2293.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83755274262 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96515591231 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493670886076 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 718.2 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5605917117 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.72 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.96 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1814582555 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0627780882522 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595208836282 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119639998635 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309250275679 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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