Some people say that what children watch influences their behavior. Others believe the amount of time they spend on television influences their behavior most.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Watching television has tremendous impact on youngster’s behavior whether it is difficult to understand which one is most hazardous; the content of TV or the amount of hours spending in front of TV. Though it is true that prolong periods of watching TV is deleterious for adolescents, however I also suppose that any harmful materials which are shown on television has severe impacts on children’s manners. This essay will illustrate both of these notions with pertinent examples.
On the one hand, it is comprehensible that excess TV watching is not only detrimental for behavioral change but also destructive for their early academic studies. As a result, youngsters get adapted to sedentary lifestyle, and they become inactive both physically and mentally. Moreover, as they spend huge time by watching TV, their communication skill cannot develop properly, ultimately adolescents lack essential proficiency for their future career. Most of them remain inside of their home without performing outdoor activities which in turn, may lead to obesity and different physical and mental health problems.
On the other side, it is also recognizable that contents of the television have great impact on children’s attitudes. It is undeniable that watching unhealthy materials on TV have damaging impacts on children’s manners. For example, the contents having violent activities, adult scene or any other inappropriate substances can cause negative change on children’s behavior. Besides, youngsters may commit serious crime such an early age without sufficient knowledge.
In conclusion, it is understandable that watching TV for long hours is not healthy for children for their proper growth. So, parents should be aware of maintaining appropriate time and choosing secure contents for their children to protect them from side effects of TV.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2019-11-19 | jdsmss | 89 | view |
| 2019-11-03 | Rifat shanta | 78 | view |
| 2019-10-04 | Ankita7443 | 67 | view |
- In western countries many people spend lots of money on their pets They buy special food for their cats and dogs but them toys and often pay high fees for their medical treatment Some people think this is a waste of money and argue that pets are dirty 84
- Some people believe that unpaid community services should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children).To what extent do you agree or disagree? 56
- The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? 61
- We have been living in the nuclear age now for over half a century. Since the first atomic bombs were developed, nuclear technology has provided governments with the ability to totally destroy the planet. Yet the technology has been put to positive use as 73
- Some people say that what children watch influences their behavior. Others believe the amount of time they spend on television influences their behavior most.Discuss both views and give your opinion. 78
Comments
can you please explain a
can you please explain a little more about mistakes of this essay and how can i improve?
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 195, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to secure'
Suggestion: to secure
...intaining appropriate time and choosing secure contents for their children to protect ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, for example, in conclusion, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.64184397163 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20666408164 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617021276596 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2680368642 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.384615385 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6923076923 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92307692308 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221916630971 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805912861818 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0441193616818 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136855105149 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0379329699724 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.43 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.