TPO 34
The time one spends on education is one of the most crucial periods in one's life; as it leads one to happiness and satisfaction and shapes the ensuing life. Hence one of the most controversial issues amongst many people is the children's education level. As far as I am concerned in the state of ambivalence, I might lean toward recent education improvement and feasibility. Conceivably, some people believe that there are more hardships in teaching children compared to the past, however, there are many reasons such as resource enhancement and lecturers experience improvement which can declare a higher beneficiary of recent education methods. I will interpret my points in the following essay.
First, references are advantageous due to the valuable knowledge that included in the materials. Doubtlessly, wisdom helps to broaden the happiness level and enrich one's life quality. To obtain resources one community needs technology to collect and transmit data and technologies such as the internet, cell phone, etc. which would not be available in the test. Granted, technology disturbs children, but there are many other distracting means. As an illustrative example, some years ago when I attended high school at Beheshty high school in Iran, there was a girl named Sara. Sara used to spend many hours on the internet, surfing through websites. In the beginning, everyone assumed that she is going to fail the exams, but it was not true. Fortunately, she gained the highest score in many subjects and even got selected as the captain of the computer team. The time she spent on technology was meant to destroy her education, but she was, in fact, learning about school subjects via technology, and things did not go as the classmates, who spend their time on inefficiently, assumed. As one can see, resources are valuable to gain knowledge and associates with recent improvements in devices.
Secondly, it is not presumptuous to judge improvements in the educational system regarding the time. No man can truly assume a bad teaching experience in the past, but it is evident that teachers and parents have much knowledge regarding the children compared to the past. A teacher who appears to teach sufficiently might have spent a great amount of time surfing the internet about trending teaching methods and Educational experience, in many cases. My personal experiences are the foundation behind my next point. The time researchers spend to develop educational knowledge directly influences the teachers' experiences in teaching methods which are imperative to better methods being used in schools and the educational system. Surely, it is wise to value the technology and internet than to deny its benefits and stick to past educational methods.
I am of the conviction that one needs many references and experienced teachers. It is my suggestion and its effects are clear in the knowledge reinforcement between today's students and them experiencing facilitated educational methods at school. Based on the aforementioned reasons, I conclude that children's education is easier and more fun compared to the past. All in all, a coin has two sides and an edge to connect them, so it is wise to use technology sufficiently.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 72, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...n is one of the most crucial periods in ones life; as it leads one to happiness and ...
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Line 1, column 158, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...tisfaction and shapes the ensuing life. Hence one of the most controversial issues am...
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Line 3, column 166, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... broaden the happiness level and enrich ones life quality. To obtain resources one c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, in fact, such as, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2712.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 520.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21538461538 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00024653819 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517307692308 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 857.7 618.680645161 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9862463309 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.307692308 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.69230769231 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 10.002688172 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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