some people feel that entertainment are paid too much do you agree or disagree which type of job should be highly paid
entertainment is a huge industrial sector in many countries such as korean, us, uk. it earns billions od money per years and contributes a large part of GDP. consequently, i do not think that actors, singers or sports stars are paid too much money just equal to what they has done.
obviously, entertainers who they have great talent or ability to sing, take part in films or play a particular sport, are delicate to their job. if they decide to enter this industry, they must spend more and more time on their career, experience a tough competition with the others. besides, their work creates many products which are necessary to vast amount of people, also gain a lot of money, reputation to producers and people whose job is related to. for example, descendants of the sun,a super film which is produced by korean, attracted a huge number of audience from many Asia countries such as Vietnam, china, Thailand and so forth
in vietnam, i find many jobs which require employers to sit in one place to finish their duty during 8 hours a day, or work in a dangerous and poisonous environment. such work can be mentioned are workers in textile industry, mining sector. additionally, people whose job begin in the evening and complete in the next morning are very exhausted. they must work and concentrate in time when they need to be sleep and relax like the other. that is opposite to their biological clock, takes them a long time to adapt and seriously harm their health. because of these reasons, i strongly suppose that higher salary and all kind of healthy insurance are compulsory to practice.
eventually, increasing salary and buying other sort of insurance for work is not the best solution to protect workers. personally, i believe that improving the working environment will gain a better result, create a sustainable economy
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, if, so, for example, kind of, sort of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1529.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86942675159 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68164212962 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.640127388535 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.3616874698 49.4020404114 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.214285714 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4285714286 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.01903807615 359% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123666746877 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0378053515695 0.084324248473 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045123725328 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0680237734166 0.151304729494 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0451922233316 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.