These days some people spend a lot of money on tickets to go to sporting or cultural events.
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Spending money on sports and cultural events is not new. However, a new trend has been formed among a group of people in societies. They spend lots of money to go to sporting and cultural events. I believe it has more drawbacks than earning.
Some advocate events such as the football world cup and Olympics due to the economical growth, they bring to the host society. Based on statistics of the World Bank, a football world cup can cut the unemployment rate to almost zero percent. Nevertheless, this is short-term and cost to compensate for the damage these happenings cause to the environment is more than the real earning of these events.
A huge amount of energy will be consumed to build buildings to accommodate people during the event. These buildings have to be destroyed after the event as they have no use anymore and usually are left empty if not destroyed. Both building and destruction of these structures damage the environment. In addition, this money can be used to invest in individual education and family. Many researches showed that people tend to put their money on such events rather than their education and family. They are usually with a low-level of education and consequently have difficulty to find a good and stable job, and their family suffers from bad life conditions such as living in an old and horrible apartment.
To sum, I strongly advocate that the new trend as a huge number of drawbacks which some of them have been mentioned in this essay and therefore considering warning people about their harmful effects through media may help to alter the trend.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 77, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...tball world cup and Olympics due to the economical growth, they bring to the host society....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1342.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91575091575 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63875624556 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2534512728 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8571428571 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78571428571 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201836980198 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0832713312856 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111809468074 0.0667982634062 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129123033033 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.096109051016 0.056905535591 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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