Some people think that women should be able to join the army, navy or air forces like what men do. Others think that only men should do thatTo what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think that women should be able to join the army, navy or air forces like what men do. Others think that only men should do that

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Opinion are divided on whether women are allowed to take a mission in the military like men or they should not do that. I wholeheartedly agree this former opinion.

The first idea need to be consideration is that most people should bear in mind that a weak physical health of women is a main reason why they cannot do the army. However, there is a variety jobs that not related to flight back the enemy in battle filed such as cook, nurse, etc, this means they are able to support their solider behind the stage. Furthermore, thank to development of technique, many people are equipped the mechanical combat suits or an unpiloted aircraft, etc, in the war and it is not require more strength to flight like the past of time.

The second point is that there were many evidences in the past show that the woman who undertake protecting the freedom by going against the enemy, the so-called “ Hai Ba Trung” in historical Viet Nam could exemplify precisely is consider to be the unsung hero of the war. This is because they flight back the people who attacked in Vietnamese from china around two years. Another example is that Mu Lan being a person from china disguise men to take part in military in 19 century. Hence, those who claim that female have never had a place in the military are wrong.

in conclusion, I strongly believe that there are no exaggeration to said that women is necessary to contribute to serve the army, navy or air forces like men do.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'required'.
Suggestion: required
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Suggestion: considered
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'century' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'centuries'.
Suggestion: centuries
...uise men to take part in military in 19 century. Hence, those who claim that female hav...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...a place in the military are wrong. in conclusion, I strongly believe that the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, so, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1219.0 1615.20841683 75% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63498098859 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46849775851 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608365019011 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 392.4 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.880497873 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.9 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.9 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229454025351 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0865106653293 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0949259725673 0.0667982634062 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160889709426 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0838762326988 0.056905535591 147% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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