The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee.
"We recommend that Grove College preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. It is true that a majority of faculty members voted in favor of coeducation, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. But 80 percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumnae who answered a separate survey also opposed coeducation. Keeping the college all female will improve morale among students and convince alumnae to keep supporting the college financially."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The recommendation asseverates strong disapproval from the students, not to the possibility of morale corruption and a retrench of funding by the alumnae. Moreover, the faculty wanting to change the matriculation policy of the university to accrue more appliers. However, the passage is cogent and will need to provide additional proof to persuade the governing committee.
First of all, the faculties assertions should be further supported by logical evidence to why applicants will want to enter the university if it yields to a coeducation system. Applicants wanting to enter prominent schools would not apply to this academy because of it's poor reputation and the altercation of it's education system will not change their minds. Or, because of the limited subjects that the school provides, applicants will not increase and search for a more pertinent school to pursue their dreams. Nevertheless, because of the pool of highschool graduates allowed to apply are increased, the assertion of the faculty cannot be totally overlooked.
Next, surveys are prone to pitfalls because of the failure to incorporate all of the student's or alumnue's opinions about coeducation. For example, the survey conducted in the humanities department, which is famous for supporting feminism, may abhor the idea of men entering their education system. On the other hand, students in the Natural Science department may be indifferent to this case. All in all, surveys are not a credible source of information: more information about it should be given to be regarded as a reliable source of information.
Finally, it is not lucid that keeping up with the tradition will help increase the morale standards and constant subsidy from the alumnae. Morale, is a subjective value and by allowing diversity among the students, the morale may increase due to the understanding of various people. Moreover, because of the diversity, in the long term the financial support of the graduates may increase due to the wider support or vocations they might enter: after the modification more graduates started working in technological fields. Nevertheless, the revel environment of both gender getting along may inhibit the academic milieu and thus the author should elaborate on this issue to be further coherent with the message.
In conclusion, although appealing, fails to provide evidence for the increase in applicants after modifications of the tradition. Apart from this, it should be explicit on the foundations of the survey and the correlation of morals and funding with the tradition of the academy.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... as a reliable source of information. Finally, it is not lucid that keeping up...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, thus, apart from, for example, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2201.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 407.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40786240786 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00267615425 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5085995086 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.267397301 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 129.470588235 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9411764706 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.52941176471 5.70786347227 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0467755601379 0.218282227539 21% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0164177497059 0.0743258471296 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0196154686117 0.0701772020484 28% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.029343115684 0.128457276422 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0194796938561 0.0628817314937 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.32208582834 116% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 98.500998004 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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