Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should be not allowed
Nowadays tv channels are full of commercials. It has a powerful influence on our minds, especially to young minds. I strongly agree with the statement, that television advertising for preschool-aged children should be not allowed for 2 compelling reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, children are innocent and very impressionable, therefore they can easily trust everything they have seen and want it in an uncontrollable way, which is dangerous for an emotional well-being and a mental health of a baby. For instance, when I was a kid I had been so impressed by the latest, for those days, collection of Barbies. I cried to my mom, that I want the doll so badly. My situation demonstrates how bright advertising makes children cry and negatively influences on them.
Furthermore, advertising agitates children to clime things from TV. However, not every parent can afford what their children desire. Consequently, a budget of a family suffers from baying not truly essential things. As an illustration of my argument I reminded one case from my childhood. I was not aware of how my mom and dad earn money, like most of children in age from two to five do. I require new barbies as often as a new advertising came into break between cartoons to channel for children. I did not realize how mach exactly all that cost to my family. I still fell sorry about my behavior since I grew up. My one experience shows a problem, which commercials directed toward preschool-aged children, creates.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should be not allowed. That kind of commercials is dangerous for children well-being and has bad consequences for their parents wallets.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an uncontrollable way" with adverb for "uncontrollable"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...from baying not truly essential things. As an illustration of my argument I remind...
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Line 5, column 345, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the children') or simply say ''most children''.
Suggestion: most of the children; most children
... of how my mom and dad earn money, like most of children in age from two to five do. I require n...
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Line 5, column 500, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...tween cartoons to channel for children. I did not realize how mach exactly all th...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ach exactly all that cost to my family. I still fell sorry about my behavior sinc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, however, so, still, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1479.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 293.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04778156997 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08245358617 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610921501706 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.0120814522 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.1666666667 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2777777778 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38888888889 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354471133837 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0996719082946 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150146578956 0.0737576698707 204% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239437999057 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.140551565786 0.0645574589148 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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