Shopping is the favourite pastime for most of the young people. Why do you think is that? Do you think they should be encouraged to do some other useful activities?
In recent times, people are coming up with various activities during their free time and shopping is on their priority list. There are several factors behind this phenomenon, which I would argue as there are other vital things for youngsters to focus in their free time.
First of all, nowadays, shopping and spending a lot of money has become a status symbol among younger generation. This is because buying various unwanted things such as designer cloths and latest gadgets like mobile phones are used to impress their peers and gain domination over them. Furthermore, fashion might change very fast and these spending is such as waste of not only money but also time. Another reason for this trend is, shopping is absolutely free of cost. It is not necessary for all shoppers to buy the things what they see in the stores. For instance, it is quite common that young people who are studying do not have heavy pockets to buy whatever they like. Instead they do some window shopping and try out different outfits.
However, I firmly believe that parents can do something here to motivate their children to utilize their time efficiently. Because, parents with whom they spend a lot of time, get a wide opportunity to identify their child’s interest and encourage them to take up on their favourite sport or other cultural activities like singing, dancing, and reading. As a result, this could help the younger generation to learn an art or a skill that could indirectly help or support them in future, in terms of fame and money. Whereas, shopping will only help in spending time and money and gain nothing.
To sum up, despite shopping is a kind of entertainment for young people in order to pass their free time, I opine that it is a total waste of time. Instead young people need to value their precious time in learning other crucial activities like reading, singing, and sports.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, whereas, for instance, kind of, such as, as a result, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1573.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4144417562 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566153846154 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.013965932 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.866666667 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184156539713 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068992740622 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579339676107 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113535823034 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399599868566 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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