You live in an English speaking country and you want to do some voluntary unpaid work in a developing country Write a letter to a company called Cultural Expeditions which organizes such trips In your letter Explain why you want to do the voluntary work S

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You live in an English speaking country and you want to do some voluntary, unpaid work in a developing country. Write a letter to
a company called Cultural Expeditions, which organizes such trips. In your letter:
• Explain why you want to do the voluntary work.
• State what your skills and experience are.
• Indicate where you would like to volunteer and for how long

Submitted by somu on Fri, 04/24/2020 - 08:43

Ans:- Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is Samvedna Puri, dweller of Haward Street, North London and i am a medical practioner by profession. I am inscribing this piece of epistle to express my willingness for voluntary work in a developing nation. Also being a social worker, i aspire to offer my services free of cost to needy people who do not have access to basic medical facilities.

Since, it has been 8 years working as senior doctor in Cromwell hospital therefore, i consider myself capable enough to bestow destitute denizens with medical assistance. My area of specification is cardiovascular hence patients suffering from heart diseases will receive medications without any charge and check up.

Even though, health associated aids are required in every part of world, this time i would prefer to commute underprivilaged villages of South Africa due to the escalated mortality rate. Moreover, hospital management approved a month break only but i can assure to utilise the maximum time each day.

I anticipate a prompt response from your end.

Your faithfully,
Samvedna Puri.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ller of Haward Street, North London and i am a medical practioner by profession. ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... voluntary work in a developing nation. Also being a social worker, i aspire to offe...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ing nation. Also being a social worker, i aspire to offer my services free of cos...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... doctor in Cromwell hospital therefore, i consider myself capable enough to besto...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...uired in every part of world, this time i would prefer to commute underprivilaged...
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Line 8, column 150, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...underprivilaged villages of South Africa due to the escalated mortality rate. Mor...
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Line 8, column 251, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...agement approved a month break only but i can assure to utilise the maximum time ...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to utilise the maximum time each day. I anticipate a prompt response from your...
^^^
Line 14, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d. Your faithfully, Samvedna Puri.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 32.9175257732 52% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 928.0 937.175257732 99% => OK
No of words: 176.0 206.0 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27272727273 4.54256449028 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92688097322 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.778409090909 0.622605031667 125% => OK
syllable_count: 297.0 290.88556701 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.41237113402 120% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2712321846 44.8134815571 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.111111111 76.5299724578 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5555555556 16.8248392259 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 4.34317383033 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0638758113596 0.216113520407 30% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0269371525972 0.0766984524023 35% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0328349659868 0.0603063233224 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0250423416997 0.12726935374 20% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264424551078 0.0580467560999 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 8.37731958763 158% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 70.7449484536 62% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 7.45979381443 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 8.71597938144 152% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.14 7.59969072165 133% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 41.2886597938 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 70, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ller of Haward Street, North London and i am a medical practioner by profession. ...
^
Line 3, column 218, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... voluntary work in a developing nation. Also being a social worker, i aspire to offe...
^^^^
Line 3, column 246, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ing nation. Also being a social worker, i aspire to offer my services free of cos...
^
Line 5, column 85, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... doctor in Cromwell hospital therefore, i consider myself capable enough to besto...
^
Line 8, column 84, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...uired in every part of world, this time i would prefer to commute underprivilaged...
^
Line 8, column 150, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...underprivilaged villages of South Africa due to the escalated mortality rate. Mor...
^^
Line 8, column 251, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...agement approved a month break only but i can assure to utilise the maximum time ...
^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to utilise the maximum time each day. I anticipate a prompt response from your...
^^^
Line 14, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d. Your faithfully, Samvedna Puri.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 32.9175257732 52% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 928.0 937.175257732 99% => OK
No of words: 176.0 206.0 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27272727273 4.54256449028 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92688097322 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.778409090909 0.622605031667 125% => OK
syllable_count: 297.0 290.88556701 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.41237113402 120% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2712321846 44.8134815571 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.111111111 76.5299724578 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5555555556 16.8248392259 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 4.34317383033 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0638758113596 0.216113520407 30% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0269371525972 0.0766984524023 35% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0328349659868 0.0603063233224 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0250423416997 0.12726935374 20% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264424551078 0.0580467560999 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 8.37731958763 158% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 70.7449484536 62% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 7.45979381443 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 8.71597938144 152% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.14 7.59969072165 133% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 41.2886597938 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.