The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement.
"Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire, because it has spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate. Another advantage is that housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Moreover, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. And best of all, retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author recommends Clearview for those who want to retire. To support the recommendation the author states that Clearview has spectacular natural beauty, consistent climate, lower housing costs and taxes, improving infrastructure and presence of greater number of physicians. Though, at first glance, the argument looks convincing, upon cogitating, one realizes that there are quite a few missing evidences in the argumnet that insubstantiate the argument.
First, the author mentions that Clearview has a spectaculare natural beauty. But what exactly does the author mean by natural beauty? Natural beauty can mean anything from a seaview to pristine green mountains. Not all kinds of natural beauty appeal to those who want to retire. In order for the author's argument to be more convincing, he/she should have mentioned the kind of natural beauty the Clearview encompasses. Another point to consider is do all the retiring folks prefer natural beauty to spend their pass time? The answer to this question could validate the author's recommendation of Clearview.
Second, the author is very vague when he/she states that Clearview has a consistent climate. The author should put forward specific evidence that gives a clear idea of the type of climate in Clearview. When the author states that Clearview has a consistent climate, there is every possilbity that the climate can be consistently hot, cold, rainy or just the right conditions throughout the year. A prospect reading the argument could fallaciously assume that Clearveiw has a climate whichever he/she likes throughout the year and purchase a house in Clearview only to regret after he/she reaches Clearview. Thus, the evidence supporting the exact type of climate would bolster the recommendation by the author.
Finally, the author states that the house prices in Clearveiw had significantly come down and the taxes are lower than those in neighboring towns. The author should be more specific about prices of the houses in the last year and by what amount did they come down. For example, the average price of the house could be 2 crores last year and it would have come down to 1 crore. The decrease, though significant, but is still pretty prohibitive for retiring people to purchase the house. The answer to these questions would help evaluate the author's claim that the prices of the houses in Clearview have down significantly.
Therefore, as stated, there are quite a few evidences that the author needs to pur forward for his recommendation to be worthy.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 411 350
No. of Characters: 2078 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.503 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.056 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.739 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.918 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.476 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.367 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.572 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.155 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 157, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...learview has spectacular natural beauty, consistent climate, lower housing costs ...
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Line 2, column 160, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s. Though, at first glance, the argument looks convincing, upon cogitating, one r...
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Line 6, column 143, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o those who want to retire. In order for the authors argument to be more convinci...
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Line 7, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... who want to retire. In order for the authors argument to be more convincing, he/she ...
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Line 7, column 144, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Clearview encompasses. Another point to consider is do all the retiring folks pr...
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Line 8, column 134, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...wer to this question could validate the authors recommendation of Clearview. Secon...
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Line 8, column 159, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d validate the authors recommendation of Clearview. Second, the author is very...
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Line 11, column 152, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...put forward specific evidence that gives a clear idea of the type of climate in C...
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Line 20, column 144, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s claim that the prices of the houses in Clearview have down significantly. Th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, look, second, still, therefore, thus, for example, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2166.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 407.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32186732187 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80629695465 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484029484029 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.621212071 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.142857143 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.380952381 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95238095238 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 18.0 5.15768463074 349% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24559987458 0.218282227539 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0820339321984 0.0743258471296 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0425334234572 0.0701772020484 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0820486273884 0.128457276422 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445862222504 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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