Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Private time plays an essential part in everybody's life. We all work hard nowadays in the competing environment and after burning a midnight oil, we need a privacy. Although some people would harbor the view that celeberities don't deserve privacy as they are in a entertainment business, I am of the conviction that entertainers and athletes need private space, and would develop my ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, without ignoring the fact that celeberities enjoy the people's attention, they do need private space to spend time with their family and friends. While performing, they conquer several challenges in terms of travelling to new locations, meeting people from different nationalities, etc. so they need to spend time with their nears and dears to live stress-free life. I must say that my opinion on this matter is profoundly influenced my own experience. For example, last year, I was travelling from Delhi to Mumbai. In the flight, I met a renowned cricketer name Kapil Dev, who looks energetic and friendly. But I oveserved that people in the flight took unnecessary advantage by clicking his phorographs without his permission, which I did not appreciate. As we can see from this example, if we don't give entertainers and sportsmen a space, they are frustrated.
Secondly, famous people's children are the most effected in our society due to undesired attention given by photographers. Although children love to get clicked, but if they develop a habit of people around them at all places such as restaurants, fitness clubs, showrooms etc., they started to feel like celeberities without making any hardwork. Thus, this behivour can ruin thier career. Drawing from my experience, I can recall about one of the great actor Dharemder Singh from Bollywood, who was popular in ninties. However, his son who, was always pictured in his young age, later became drug addict because he was influenced with a high attention. For this reason, had media not given him an importance, his career would not have ruined.
In view of the reasons mentioned, I would strongly recommend giving entertainers and athletes a private space. This is because they can live stress-free life with with their parents and family whereas, their children can focus on their careers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, thus, whereas, while, for example, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1922.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1528150134 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86401873935 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592493297587 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.379474652 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.157894737 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6315789474 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42105263158 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125050167243 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0352045102248 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385950553755 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0808381762529 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0131748511094 0.0645574589148 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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