The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Humans are slaves of their own inventions. The more development in the field of technology, the more laid back people become. Latest upgrade in the tech sector may increase comfort and leisure, but that shouldn't be the primary goal to develop new innovations. In my opinion, I disagree with the claim of leisure being the primary goal for three reasons.
To begin with, all the latest development in the science and technology has made humans more and more hungry and totally dependent on the these gadgets. Take for example, popular social media applications like Facebook and Instagram. These applications let you connect with your friends, loved ones staying in different parts of the world. It totally reduces the time in connecting and conveying the message. But in the hindsight, new age kids are completely hooked to these platforms spending hours of their precious childhood watching and uploading videos in the belief of getting instant fame. These kids are no longer focused in developing their career. Instead of utilizing it for better purposes like current affairs, updates in the field of their interest, etc. The kids recklessly spend their time doing unproductive work. This is exactly opposite to the claim where efficiency is supposed to increase. The example illustrates how technology has only made the matters worse for the kids.
To add further, people have been taught about traditional knowledge from their ancestors in many fields like cooking, farming, etc. These are age old processes which have been fine tuned over the years to serve the best purpose. With technology, these ancient ideas are slowly getting moribund, thereby losing great amount of historic culture. For example, people used to paint their houses with cow dung so that many insects and bacteria are killed when in contact and helps in maintaining a better health. With the current generation, these age old practices are neglected because of which many kids are suffering from diseases at such a young age. Neglecting tradition in the name of leisure and advancement will have a negative impact on the overall development. The example illustrates how the purpose of increasing people's efficiency has impacted negatively on the public.
One might argue that, the more advancement in technology is making people's life easier and one should be encouraged to do so. But the more we are dependent on technology, the more crippled we get. For example, people are no longer interested in travelling by foot for small distances, they use their vehicles or get it from an online website to their doorstep. There is minimal physical activity in the name of leisure and relaxation, thereby making the body more and more lethargic. Lack of exercising has a direct impact on the life span as the immunity reduces. Too much dependence on the technology is a bane for the public in the coming years.
Technology has made life easier, and will continue to do so. Developing technology keeping leisure time as a fundamental goal will harm the society. One should develop technology for the overall development, not just spending more leisure time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: ' the Latest'.
Suggestion: The Latest
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Line 1, column 204, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
... increase comfort and leisure, but that shouldnt be the primary goal to develop new inno...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, for example, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2627.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 512.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.130859375 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66850844994 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529296875 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 836.1 704.065955056 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.2370786517 148% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.5883891887 60.3974514979 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.5666666667 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0666666667 23.4991977007 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.96666666667 5.21951772744 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294434921436 0.243740707755 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0684048484127 0.0831039109588 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511271429789 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16495310082 0.150359130593 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323076604864 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 100.480337079 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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