The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
In contemporary society, competition among the peers is not a trivial concern. There is competition everywhere, in every sector, for promotion, for getting good grades and most importantly for portrying one's superiority over others. The prompt suggests that it is important to instil the sense of cooperation in young people to better prepare them for leadership positions in the government, or in organizations or other areas. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the suggestion and explain my reasoning for the position I take by listing out two pivotal factors.
To beign with, a sense of cooperation is essential in every being regardless of his job. Research has consistently shown that tasks performed in cooperation with colleagues tend to have more effective results and outcomes. For instance, the employees in Tata Consultancy Services are so cooperative in nature and a congenial being that they are the ones to make the company a global success. In the company's annual findings it was found that the employees had a propensity to help their peers and proceed together. When there is a sense of compatibility among the individuals, it is then possible to fully leverage the situation to work collaboratively towards achieveing a common objective. This example illustrates that cooperation among individuals can boost the organizations overall eficiency and in return even the understanding between its employees.
Additonally, a sense of competition tends to drag a person towards becoming an evil rather than a friendly creature. In an competitive environment, one aims to satiate his needs first over another. Consider the example of an inividual in working in an organization cunningly in order to get his promotion and double his pay. His or her attitude towards his mates would not be an innocuous one, which in return would hinder the overall development of the organization. Therefore, it is imperative that a sense of cooperation be instilled in he young minds way before they realize the harsh reality of world. Research has proved that manners and the moral values essentially drives the bad in them making them a better person.
Although, some critics might argue that competition among peers help them to quickly forage and bring solutions to the table. However, in a long run this strategy do not work out often. Plus, if we ruminate thorougly on the above mentioned points it is patent that cooperation among the individuals is a crucial factor for not only for the complete development of the organization but also its employees.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 204, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ades and most importantly for portrying ones superiority over others. The prompt sug...
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Line 5, column 121, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...vil rather than a friendly creature. In an competitive environment, one aims to sa...
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Line 5, column 538, Rule ID: HE_THE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'in the young'?
Suggestion: in the young
...hat a sense of cooperation be instilled in he young minds way before they realize the harsh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, still, then, therefore, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2151.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 414.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19565217391 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07455664295 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565217391304 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5170989324 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.210526316 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7894736842 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52631578947 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294072846591 0.243740707755 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791675570122 0.0831039109588 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0931848328654 0.0758088955206 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173203654692 0.150359130593 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0950563980372 0.0667264976115 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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