Subjects such as Art, Sport and Music are being dropped from the school curriculum for subjects such as Information Technology. Many children suffer as a result of these changes.
To what extent would you support or reject the idea of moving these subjects from school curriculum?
Classification of shooling subjects has always cast doubt on numerous educators, whether it is appropriate and effective. Not only do I hold that schools should have helped children skillfully touching life in many aspects but also looking as it is without limited perception from educational standpoints.
Firstly, youngsters have alarmingly suffered since society created unbalanced job opportunities. As can be seen easily from many educational systems, mental and physical dimensions are underestimated, such as sport, art, and music. And hence people are creating countless lawyers, doctors, and architects instead of monks or farmers. Paradoxically, prestigious jobs, politician as an example, has a much lower income than a footballer.
On the other hand, children will not suffer from real-life experience; and vice versa, they may be miserable with any so-called subject such as Maths or Physics. Ironically, they might gather a vast amount of information in those subjects without knowing how to apply it to their real life. For example, a physicist probably does not know how to have a proper physical movement, or a techie may not understand how his biological computer as a mind functions at its best possibility instead of mastering virtual reality. Moreover, the most fulfilled individuals like sellers, healers, architects, artists, and leaders in the world mostly get real education from life experience. Therefore, the correlation between subjects and life dimensions plays a significant role in assisting children in desperate to experience life meaningfully.
In my perspective, if there were an educational revolution, educators should have transformed all the divisive subjects without discrimination and started to unify them with life both from inside to outside the children's minds.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... a much lower income than a footballer. On the other hand, children will not suf...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, for example, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.6875 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18369404369 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.691176470588 0.561755894193 123% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4001888117 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.916666667 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41666666667 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199842169024 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0683336513411 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600730209524 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11084869443 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0214016975852 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.02 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.01 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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