The following appeared in a memorandum from the owner of the Juniper Cafe, a small, local coffee shop in the downtown area of a small American city:
"We must reduce overhead here at the cafe.Instead of opening at 6 am weekdays we will now open at 8 am. On weekend, we will only open from 9 am until 4 pm. The decrease in hours of operation will save money because we wont be paying for utilitie, employee wages, or other operating costs during the hours closed. This is the best strategy for us to save money and remain in business without having to eliminate jobs."
The owner of the Juniper Cafe might be seriously concerned and focused on cutting down on the costs incurred from the operational costs of the cafe. The author's strategy of decreasing the number of hours on weekdays and weekends might seriously reduce the operational costs but may have loss of sales and end up having only losses in their business and eventually eliminating jobs of many.I strongly feel that the owner is looking only at one side of the problem and completely and ignorantly overlooking the repursions with this kind of strategy.
To believe that the owner's strategy might be validated and substantiated, the owner could have provided evidence proving that the sales are sparse and scant before 8 am in the morning during the weekdays and after 4pm in the weekends. The author fails to provide data about the cafe's sales and number of visitors during the day and night hours on weekdays and weekends.Let us consider that since its a weekend many people wake up late and would like to go out of the house during the evenings and if they find that the cafe is closed, then it would eventually decrease the number of sales, though it is reducing the operational costs of the cafe. This would weaken the owner's argument. Business people and other city workers stop by the cafe to have their morning breakfast or coffee.
Further, the owner does mention that the cafe is in the downtown of the city, there is a higher chance that the cost of living in downtown places will be much higher comparitively. May be that could be the primary reason. And due to that, the owner could consider change of place of the cafe that could save the him/her a lot of money.
The owner does mention that its a small cafe, and also mentions that we need not reduce the montly wages of the workers. If its a small cafe, there could be a possibility that the owner is maintaining a larger number of staff, or investing more amount on utilities, which could just be superfluous, and prove to be wasting money. To substantiate the suggestion made by the owner, he/ she should have provided data regarding the number of workers or staff members that the owner employs, their monthly wages, or incentives, the elecricity bills, or water bills, etc. Using all the aforementioned data, we could either suggest and encourage that the owner's strategy is right or find out the loop holes and find a better strategy that does not allow cutting down on the working hours of the cafe.
From the memorandum of the cafe owner, his main motive is to save money, and to not eliminate jobs, and to support the strategy mentioned by the owner, they should have provided data regarding the monthly sales of the cafe spread over each weekday and weekend, and to decide to cut down the number of working hours, it would be advicable for the owner to provide data regarding sales for each hours, the monthly wages of the employess and number of staff members. Overlooking this data and blindly employing the strategy suggested by the owner may bring about negative impact on the sales of the cafe and would bring in more loss and eventually shut down of the cafe.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 556 350
No. of Characters: 2540 1500
No. of Different Words: 227 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.856 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.568 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.365 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 39.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 25.342 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.437 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.437 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.213 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 154, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... the operational costs of the cafe. The authors strategy of decreasing the number of ho...
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Line 1, column 390, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...and eventually eliminating jobs of many.I strongly feel that the owner is looking...
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Line 2, column 22, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'owners'' or 'owner's'?
Suggestion: owners'; owner's
...kind of strategy. To believe that the owners strategy might be validated and substan...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 168, Rule ID: AM_IN_THE_MORNING[1]
Message: Use simply 'am'.
Suggestion: am
...the sales are sparse and scant before 8 am in the morning during the weekdays and after 4pm in th...
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Line 2, column 279, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cafes'' or 'cafe's'?
Suggestion: cafes'; cafe's
... author fails to provide data about the cafes sales and number of visitors during the...
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Line 2, column 370, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Let
...nd night hours on weekdays and weekends.Let us consider that since its a weekend ma...
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Line 2, column 397, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...and weekends.Let us consider that since its a weekend many people wake up late and ...
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Line 2, column 670, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'owners'' or 'owner's'?
Suggestion: owners'; owner's
...osts of the cafe. This would weaken the owners argument. Business people and other cit...
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Line 3, column 186, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
... will be much higher comparitively. May be that could be the primary reason. And d...
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Line 3, column 309, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'him'?
Suggestion: the; him
...ge of place of the cafe that could save the him/her a lot of money. The owner does me...
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Line 4, column 30, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...of money. The owner does mention that its a small cafe, and also mentions that we...
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Line 4, column 125, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...uce the montly wages of the workers. If its a small cafe, there could be a possibil...
^^^
Line 4, column 648, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ld either suggest and encourage that the owners strategy is right or find out the...
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Line 4, column 650, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'owners'' or 'owner's'?
Suggestion: owners'; owner's
... either suggest and encourage that the owners strategy is right or find out the loop ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, regarding, so, then, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 35.0 11.1786427146 313% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 55.5748502994 148% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2592.0 2260.96107784 115% => OK
No of words: 553.0 441.139720559 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68716094033 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84932490483 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4323635127 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.421338155515 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 804.6 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.67365269461 538% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 22.8473053892 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 125.044098888 57.8364921388 216% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 172.8 119.503703932 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.8666666667 23.324526521 158% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.70786347227 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193083672649 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729919555311 0.0743258471296 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383199710256 0.0701772020484 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112030026867 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0146253056077 0.0628817314937 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 14.3799401198 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.197005988 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 12.3882235529 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 11.1389221557 147% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.9071856287 168% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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