You are going to another country to study You would like to do a part time job while you were studying so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help

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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you were studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.

Dear Natasha,

I hope you're in the pink of your health. I am writing to enlighten you that I am coming to your place for my studies, next month, and for that I need your help to find a part-time job.

Fortunately, I've got a visa for pursuing my post-graduation in Zoology at New South wales. It is a two-year course along with a six-month research experiment. I'm happy to share this news with you that I've also got a one-year scholarship owing to my higher graduation grades.

I've already booked accommodation near to my college, but I need a part-time job while studying. It is really important for me to have a job because the college would not pay for my studies during the first semester. Therefore, a job could help me to pay the expenses of accommodation as well as college fees.

I know you've been living there for two years, so it would be easy for you to find suitable work. I would be grateful if you could forward my resume to some nearby restaurant chains, as your reference will assist me a lot. If you need any information, then call me anytime. The copy of my detailed resume is attached herewith.

Looking forward to seeing you soon.

Yours lovingly,
Elisha

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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Dear Natasha, I hope youre in the pink of your health....
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Suggestion: you're
Dear Natasha, I hope youre in the pink of your health. I am writin...
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Suggestion: I've
...o find a part-time job. Fortunately, Ive got the visa for pursuing my post-gradu...
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Suggestion: I'm
...g with a six month research experiment. Im happy to share this news with you that ...
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Suggestion: I've
... happy to share this news with you that Ive also got a one-year scholarship owing t...
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Suggestion: I've
...wing to my higher graduation grades. Ive already booked an accommodation near to...
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Line 7, column 20, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'accommodation'.
Suggestion: accommodation
...raduation grades. Ive already booked an accommodation near to my college, but I need a part-t...
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Suggestion: you've
...ion as well as college fees. I know youve been living there for two years, so it ...
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Suggestion: .
... be easy for you to find a suitable work . It would be grateful if you could forwa...
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Line 11, column 17, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to seeing'.
Suggestion: to seeing
...s attached herewith. Looking forward to see you soon. Yours lovingly, Emjay
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, really, so, then, therefore, well, while, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 32.9175257732 109% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 978.0 937.175257732 104% => OK
No of words: 216.0 206.0 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52777777778 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.83365862548 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69791169536 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 127.690721649 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615740740741 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 302.4 290.88556701 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1605646445 44.8134815571 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.8571428571 76.5299724578 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4285714286 16.8248392259 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 4.34317383033 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 2.54639175258 393% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279641451142 0.216113520407 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0882221310106 0.0766984524023 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748683723828 0.0603063233224 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153019970768 0.12726935374 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0554023469495 0.0580467560999 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 8.37731958763 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 8.71597938144 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 7.59969072165 94% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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