n some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this massage?
Children's upbringing is the most challenging part of every parent. Parent's behaviors and attitudes or even their words have a profound effect on the shaping of the children's behavior in the upcoming future. Some messages tell the children that they can achieve anything just with their effort, whereas others insist that this attitude has a lot of negative points in the real world. In my opinion, encouraging children to fight for their goals is appreciated but also they should be aware that maybe there would be some difficulties to get all dreams.
To begin with the advantages, parent's duty implies that they encourage children to achieve their goals as much as possible. It is a necessity to parent to give hopes and draw a very positive view of the future. The future that would be full of their wishes if they try hard and sufficient. It makes children be more self-confident and hopeful. Besides, this attitude brings them to society and caused them to be more fruitful to the community.
On the contrary, growing up the child with such an idea that they could get anything just by hardworking could be so dramatic and far from reality and have an inverse impact on their future. For example, in my country, students are forced to take the entry exam to receive a high level of courses just by trying hard. If the child does that and fails finally, there would be too much stress from surrounding and relatives even out of parental control. Inevitably, this over-pressure causes serious mental damages to try over and over and maybe some years behind the entry exam with succeeding stress, pressure, and passage of youth and life.
Based on the arguments outlined above, giving this attitude to children is somehow effective, but there are very demerits about that. I merely urge that parents should be avoided to do so, and they can explain more and clarify the reality of the world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, if, may, so, whereas, for example, of course, in my opinion, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1573.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82515337423 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50400898028 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552147239264 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7284342172 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.866666667 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7333333333 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263705007069 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907010503143 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614357573809 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17160718867 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558897802034 0.056905535591 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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