One year ago, Glengood Health Center in Turnville decided to start a health awareness program for its community. Since that time, Glengood’s share of patients in the Turnville area has significantly increased. Further, a nationwide survey indicates that many people in the country are greatly interested in such awareness programs. Citing these facts, the director of Carson Health Center in Poway has recommended Carson should also start such health awareness programs of its own to attract more patients from its community.
The recommendation provided by the director of Carson Health Center in Poway may seem to be a logical and well-thought argument to better the health centers market share at first, however, the recommendation is rife with holes and assumptions that may prove to cause more problems to the health center if the right questions are not asked and answered before implementing any such policy.
The recommendation states that Glenwoods share of patients in the turnville area had increased over the year since they had started a health awareness program in its community. However, the director incorrectly assumes to cause and effect relationship between the aforementioned events that had happened. The main question that must be raised here is whether the exact and only cause of Glenwoods increase in patients is due to the health awareness programs or are there other underlying reasons involved as well. Glenwoods share might have been boosted to a certain extent by its health awareness programs however it could have possibly be boosted by the outbreak of a disease like dengue in the turnville area which saw an increased no. of people going to health centers. The answer to the questions needs to see the exact proportion of increased patients who go there to solely attend the health awareness programs. If this proportion is extremely high, then and only then a cause and effect relationship can be established between the increase of patients and implementation of health awareness programs.
There is also an argument about the results of a nationwide survey presented by the director citing the responses of people in the country to be interested in health awareness programs to be a solid reason of their implementation. However, the questions must be raised about whether survey respondents actually mean what they say on a random survey that they might have filled out on their way to the work in haste or in boredom without actually giving a proper glance at what all the questions in the survey said. Also, the question about the context of the survey must be raised as the survey could be asking respondents to give their thoughts on a Likert scale about the effectiveness of health awareness programs in case of a viral outbreak and those people may not show such interest if public health is not at risk and a future point of time.
Finally, what is the location and sample size of these respondents of the survey? The respondents could be from another part of the country which is more prone to diseases like dengue due to weather conditions and thus prompts the respondents to show their interest in health awareness programs. Even respondents from turnville area showing such interest may not be shared by people from the Poway area were Carson health centre is located. If not, then there should be a survey prompted by Carson health center amongst locals of their Poway area to truly understand the level of interest that lies in health awareness programs.
If any of the aforementioned questions remain inadequately answered it may lead to a large misspend of resources from the perspective of Carson Health Center. This will lead to a failed implementation of a recommendation which may not increase their share of patients while leading to a waste of financial resources for the center.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 553 350
No. of Characters: 2730 1500
No. of Different Words: 225 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.849 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.937 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.795 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 211 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 105 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.562 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.973 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.372 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.614 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.123 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: been
...programs however it could have possibly be boosted by the outbreak of a disease li...
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...tation of health awareness programs. There is also an argument about the resu...
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... at risk and a future point of time. Finally, what is the location and sample...
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...t lies in health awareness programs. If any of the aforementioned questions r...
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...s in health awareness programs. If any of the aforementioned questions rem...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, first, however, if, may, so, then, thus, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 91.0 55.5748502994 164% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2787.0 2260.96107784 123% => OK
No of words: 553.0 441.139720559 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03978300181 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84932490483 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82517075871 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.406871609403 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 850.5 705.55239521 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.1950640671 57.8364921388 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 163.941176471 119.503703932 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.5294117647 23.324526521 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52941176471 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296335251362 0.218282227539 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113711742375 0.0743258471296 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742181881324 0.0701772020484 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163840052345 0.128457276422 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.066765690266 0.0628817314937 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 14.3799401198 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 48.3550499002 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 12.3882235529 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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