The following is a petition to the city council of Centerville:
"Over the past three years, there has been a marked increase in cases of 'sidewalk rage,' similar to the irrational anger drivers experience on the road, but instead among sidewalk walkers. The result is an increase in assaults, property damage, and disruptions of normal pedestrian traffic. In order to address this growing problem, the council must ban cell phone use on sidewalks. Not only do people texting or using their phones slow down pedestrian traffic, but they are also more likely to walk into the road or bump into other walkers. Children are especially vulnerable because they are too short to be easily seen. Middletown passed such a ban and not only have they heard no complaints, but the reported incidents of sidewalk crime has gone down significantly."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The city council of Centerville has decided to ban usage of cell phones on the sidewalks in order to tackle the problem of 'sidewalk rage'. Their decision is based on certain unsaid assumptions and experience of Middletown. But we need to take a closer look on the assumptions on which this decision is based.
First, are Centerville and Middletown's problems similar in all respects? Is the population of both the cities similar in all respects? Maybe in case of Middletown, the problems on the sidewalks are maybe due to usage of cell phones but the reason may not be same for Centerville. Maybe its the case that Centerville's sidewalks problems majorly arise from narrow sidewalks rather than using cell phones on sidewalks. Thus, we cannot blindly compare both the cities unless we know all the information about their population and the reason for incidents on the sidewalk.
Second, can we conclude that incidents like assaults, disruptions and property damage arise from using cell phones for texting on the sidewalks? It maybe possible that these incidents happen in Centerville due to poor economic condition of the city which has made its residents angrier and annoyed. It is also possible that the population of Centerville is less educated and less civilized and thus frequently engages in sidewalk rage incidents. Hence, we need more information on the population of the Centerville to make an informed decision about the reasons of sidewalk incidents.
Third, does banning cell phones have any effect on the assumption that small children will then easily be seen by pedestrians? We need to know whether short height of small children has any effect on sidewalk incidents or not. Also, it maybe possible that even after banning cell phones the short children may still not be visible to tall pedestrians and thus may have no effect on improving the traffic on the sidewalks. This assumption made by city council thus is clearly flawed as banning cell phones will not increase the height of the children and make them easily visible.
Thus, from the above three points we can clearly see that the decision taken by city council to ban cell phone usage on sidewalks is flawed. We need more information about the population of Centerville and the cause of incidents on the sidewalk before we can come to a conclusion. Hence, more supporting evidence is needed which will help us to make a better decision.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 404 350
No. of Characters: 1979 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.483 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.899 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.635 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.263 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.034 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.585 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.229 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 287, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, look, may, second, so, still, then, third, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2024.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 404.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0099009901 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69465681952 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.425742574257 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 633.6 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.7315456882 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 106.526315789 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2631578947 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78947368421 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180301316789 0.218282227539 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0702211204085 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568779835361 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120721099919 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430222165565 0.0628817314937 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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