is video games detrimental to children or develops children's intellectural
Nowadays, video games are becoming part and parcel of young people's entertainment in this high-technology era. But it appearance has lead to an argument between parents: is video games detrimental to children or develops children's intellectual? I will show both the advantages and disadvantages of video game and my opinion in this essay.
On the one hand, playing video game is really time-cosuming since most of the popular games require at least 10 hours to finish all the missions like "Blade and Soul" or "Halo". And more time for gaming means lesser for excercising-research shows that the number of children have obesity are increasing rapidly in the 21st century and they are likely to be a victim of health hazards by having a sedentary lifestyle. Moreover, video games has some adversely effects on children's behavior and phychology since they contain ferocious acts-children will internalize and imitate those actions, which might put them into dangerous situations.
But on the other hand, video games help young people to enrich their social and intellectural skill. Many games need player to communicate and cooperate with other and put the whole team benefit over personal interests, some need player to not only finish their own tasks, but also support other people to increase the winning chance, for example: "Among us" and "Minecraft". Besides, make a strategic plan and have a successful management of resources is also important for each player to compete with other opponents, which develop the problem-solving skills.
In my opinion, video games can be a great tools for children to learning if it being use for education purposes. For instance, if a teacher uses video game in class, this fun-oriented and project-based teaching may not only increase children’s learning motivation but also enhance their social and intellectual development.
In conclusion, video games can go with both advantages and disadvantages depend on the user's decision. By using video games in a proper way, children will raise the effectiveness in studying thanks to skills they gain from games.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a proper way" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...he users decision. By using video games in a proper way, children will raise the effectiveness ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, may, moreover, really, so, at least, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1817.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44011976048 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25172444369 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592814371257 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.2305315199 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.769230769 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6923076923 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3846153846 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407730278588 0.244688304435 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162406633068 0.084324248473 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126268032614 0.0667982634062 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24134569555 0.151304729494 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105605409864 0.056905535591 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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