"nowadays, people maintain better health than they did in the past" agree or disagree?
Health is not valued till the sickness comes, everybody should monitor their fitness. In my opinion, recently, people are paying more attention to improve their health than in the past. I feel in this way because we do not have only tools to aid in improving the overall health, but we also have advanced technology.
To begin with, people have a greater condition, nowadays, than in the past because they have many facilities such as gyms. In other words, societies can do some exercise by using the gym which helps to keep their bodies healthy. In fact, when bodies become healthy, people can avoid many diseases like diabetes. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. My father was diagnosed with pre-diabetes. The doctor advised him to eat healthy food and to do exercise as a daily routine to avert to have a chronic disease. My father started doing exercise a gyat m by doing aerobic workouts and swimming. As a result, when my father visited his doctor again, he said my father’s health has been improved. Because of our luxury facilities today that aid us to have a better well-being compared to the past.
Secondly, the public is healthier these days than before because they have the technology. In fact, internet supports the background for many people and increases their knowledge of what is the best to do to get better health such as what is the best food to control their blood pressure. For instance, my friend has genetic uncontrolled blood pressure. She needs to eat special food and avoid some of them. The online guides my friend to know which food has more salt than others and what is the food that is the best for her health. Consequently, the internet websites support her to improve her health and live life in a better way without any complaint. If she had not read articles on the internet, she would not have improved her health.
In conclusion, I think people have better welfare than in the past. This is because we have great services and we have developed online resources to improve our healthiness.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 711, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d my father’s health has been improved. Because of our luxury facilities today that aid...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78151260504 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52230903268 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515406162465 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.2560328184 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.2857142857 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.47619047619 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186083921879 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0622719651013 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.074343388109 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127843343486 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0151887155641 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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